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Band 5+: You are planning to attend a training course in another city. You need more information before making your arrangements. Write a letter to the course organiser. In your letter: explain why you are interested in the course; ask about the accommodation available; ask about the course schedule and fees.

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Dear sir,

I am writing to enquire about the professional traning course advertised on your website. I am intersting in joinin this course because I would like to improve my professional skills and gain practical knowledge.so, that will help me develop my career in the future.

first of all, i would like to know more about the course shedule. Could you please tell me when the classes start and how many days week they are held. I would also appreciate it if you could provided information about this course. I would like to inform the course know the course fees and additional change.

secondly,I would like to know total course fees. please let whether the fees include the study materials and registration.

finally,As I live in city in another. so, could you please inform me about the facilities and costs. I would be grateful if you could send me the relevent information as soon as possible.

I look forward to hearing from your soon.

yours faithfully

kowsar parveen

Word Count: 168

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

course: 7

would: 6

about: 4

could: 4

please: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses the three required points: it explains interest in the course, asks about schedule/duration/fees, and inquires about accommodation. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions. For example, the request for accommodation is vague ('facilities and costs') and does not explicitly mention accommodation. Additionally, the letter contains several grammatical and spelling errors (e.g., 'traning', 'intersting', 'shedule', 'provided information about this course' is unclear). To improve, ensure all points are clearly and accurately covered, and proofread for language accuracy.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter has a logical structure with clear paragraphs for each bullet point, but the flow is disrupted by abrupt transitions and incomplete sentences. For example, 'so, that will help me develop my career' and 'I would like to inform the course know the course fees' are awkward. Use cohesive devices more effectively, such as 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', and 'Regarding accommodation', to link ideas smoothly. Also, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and complete thoughts.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with some errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'traning' for 'training', 'intersting' for 'interested', 'shedule' for 'schedule', 'relevent' for 'relevant'). To improve, use a wider range of professional and precise vocabulary, such as 'I am keen to enhance my competencies', 'Could you provide details regarding the timetable', and 'I would appreciate information on accommodation options'. Avoid informal phrases like 'first of all' and 'secondly' in a formal letter; instead, use 'To begin with' and 'Furthermore'.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues that affect clarity. Examples include 'I am intersting in joinin' (should be 'I am interested in joining'), 'how many days week' (should be 'how many days per week'), 'could you provided' (should be 'could you provide'), and 'I look forward to hearing from your soon' (should be 'I look forward to hearing from you soon'). The letter also lacks proper capitalization and uses run-on sentences. To improve, practice using a variety of sentence structures, ensure subject-verb agreement, and proofread for punctuation and spelling. Focus on writing complete, accurate sentences.

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