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Band 5+: You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he /she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: - Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college. - Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her. - Suggest types of jobs that would be suitable for him/her.

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Dear Sakshi ,

I just received your letter and it seems like you are doing great this days. I am writing this letter by suggesting you to not to select an option of attaining college instead starting to apply for certains jobs.

In my opinion, this is the correct age to have a stable job which will help to earn good amount of income.Being independent can guide you to achieve your goals such as buying car and house .

However, if you still decide to study further won’t be beneficial for career as due to the raised of competitions around the world. Additional financial independent woman can make a good image in family as well as in society.

There are plenty of job opportunities where you can apply online or offline. I have few suggestions regarding jobs like working as pharmacy assistant in pharmacy store as per your bachelor degree in pharmacy. Another option is becoming as assistant teacher in daycare as we do have experience of education counselor.

I hope you will take my suggestion as serious topic and looking forward to see you next weekend.

Warm Regards

Preeti.

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

pharmacy: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all parts of the task, providing reasons against college and in favor of getting a job, along with job suggestions. However, the arguments could be more developed and personalized to the friend's specific situation. The tone is generally appropriate, but some sentences are a bit awkward and could be phrased more naturally. To improve, focus on elaborating on the points made and ensuring the language is clear and precise.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is somewhat clear, but the flow of ideas could be improved. Transitions between points are not always smooth, making it slightly difficult to follow the reasoning. Consider using more cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs more effectively. For example, use transition words to signal the relationship between ideas (e.g., 'furthermore,' 'in contrast,' 'therefore').

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is basic and somewhat repetitive. There is a lack of sophisticated word choices, which limits the depth of the arguments. To improve, try to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary that is relevant to the topic. Use a thesaurus to find synonyms and more precise words to express your ideas.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Sentence structures are often simple and lack complexity. Focus on improving sentence construction and using a variety of sentence types (e.g., compound, complex sentences) to express your ideas more effectively. Pay close attention to verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and correct use of articles and prepositions.

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