Letter

Band 6+: You rent an apartment and you are quite happy with it but you want to suggest a renovation. Write a letter about your suggestion. In your letter, you should tell: your appreciation of current condition; what is the renovation and why; what is the benefit of your suggestion.

See all user-written answers on this topic

Skyrocket your IELTS band score by 1-2 points in under a month with our premium plan!

Note: Both the topic and the answer were created by one of our users.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to suggest some improvements regarding the ventilation that could be improved.

To begin with, I would like to appreciate because the apartment I am currently renting is cozy and spacious to live in. Take the living room for an example. It comes with a modern design where allows people not only to unwind, but also to feel satisfied due to its scenic design interior.

However, I noticed that the ventilation is lacking, making it quite hard for fresh air come into the room. It would be beneficial, since its location is near the public green space which consist of fresh air. This is particularly beneficial because the majority of renters here are senior citizens who need more fresh air.

I believe that it is worth considering because you will gain people’s trust given that people may give you a five-star review. Apart from that, you also help people have a healthier lifestyle as they will breath out fresh air even if their inside.

Thank you for your attention. I hope you will take this suggestion into consideration.

Yours faithfully,

Reza

Word Count: 187

Check Your Answer On This Topic?

Check My Answer

Generate A Band-9 Sample Answer?

Generate A Sample

Overall Band Score

6.5

(+/- 0.5)

Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
Opt for even more advanced words when appropriate.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

fresh: 4

because: 3

people: 3

Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response

The letter addresses all three bullet points: it expresses appreciation for the apartment, identifies the need for improved ventilation, and explains the benefits of the suggestion. The purpose is clear and the tone is appropriate. However, there are some lapses in clarity and accuracy. For example, the phrase 'I would like to appreciate because' is awkward, and 'where allows people' contains a grammatical error. Additionally, the benefit of gaining five-star reviews is somewhat tangential and could be more directly linked to the renovation. To improve, ensure that each point is fully developed and that the language is precise and natural. Consider revising sentences for grammatical accuracy and clarity, and make sure the benefits are directly tied to the suggested renovation.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally well-organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, the flow is sometimes disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear references (e.g., 'it would be beneficial' and 'you will gain people's trust'). The use of cohesive devices is basic, and some ideas could be linked more smoothly. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and use a wider range of linking words and phrases to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource

The letter uses a reasonable range of vocabulary, with some good choices such as 'cozy', 'spacious', 'scenic design interior', and 'senior citizens'. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward expressions (e.g., 'appreciate because', 'breath out fresh air even if their inside'). To achieve a higher score, aim for more precise and natural word choices, and avoid literal translations. Expand your vocabulary to include more sophisticated and contextually appropriate terms.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Examples include 'allows people' (should be 'allows people to'), 'fresh air come into' (should be 'fresh air to come into'), 'which consist of' (should be 'which consists of'), and 'breath out' (should be 'breathe in'). Punctuation is mostly correct, but some sentences are run-ons or awkwardly constructed. To improve, review subject-verb agreement, use of infinitives, and prepositions. Practice writing more varied sentence structures with accurate grammar.

Answers On The Same Topic:

See All

Band 6+: You rent an apartment and you are quite happy with it but you want to suggest a renovation. Write a letter about your suggestion. In your letter, you should tell: your appreciation of current condition; what is the renovation and why; what is the benefit of your suggestion.

Check Your Answer On This Topic?

Generate A Band-9 Sample Answer?

Overall Band Score

Task Response

Coherence & Cohesion

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

Answers On The Same Topic:

You rent an apartment and you are quite happy with it but you want to suggest a renovation. Write a letter about your suggestion. In your letter, you should tell: your appreciation of current condition; what is the renovation and why; what is the benefit of your suggestion.

Other Topics:

You recently bought a laptop from an online store, but it arrived damaged. Write a letter to the store manager to complain about the issue. Include: when and what you bought; what the problem is; what you would like the manager to do about it.

You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter, say who are you give details about the accident suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

Check Your Answer On This Topic?

Generate A Band-9 Sample Answer?

Overall Band Score

Task Response

Coherence & Cohesion

Lexical Resource

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

Answers On The Same Topic:

Other Topics:

Plans & Pricing

Free

Premium