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Band 8+: You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter say what you have learned in your present job suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department explain why you do not wish to leave the company

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Dear Mr. Ali,

I am writing this letter to request your permission to apply for a new job vacancy in the Machine learning team in our company.

Throughout the last two years, I have been working as a software developer in the development team. During this period, a lot of experience was gained, including problem formulation, design architecture, and model pipelines. Additionally, my technical and leadership skills were also developed.

The new vacancy in the Artificial Intelligence (AI) team will be suitable for me, as I have completed my master’s in AI systems, which has covered cutting-edge technologies. Therefore, I am confident that I can contribute positively to the company’s growth with the new team.

Although a new challenge is chased, I have no desire to leave the company. I appreciate all the benefits, which are provided by the company, and I am satisfied with the working environment.

Thank you for considering my request.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Your sincerely,

Shanaka Ramesh Gunasekara.

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Vocabulary Complexity:
C1 - Intricate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:
No noticeable repetition! Great job!

Task Response

The letter appropriately addresses the task by stating the request to move to a different department, describing what has been learned in the current job, suggesting how the company would benefit, and explaining why you do not wish to leave. The content is relevant and sufficient. However, there are minor omissions and lapses: the letter mentions a 'new job vacancy' rather than a transfer to a different department, and the phrase 'a new challenge is chased' is awkward. To improve, ensure the request is clearly for a departmental move within the company, and refine language for clarity and naturalness.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is well-structured and easy to follow. The paragraphs are logically organized, each addressing a specific point from the task. The flow is smooth, and the message is clear. To achieve a perfect score, consider using more sophisticated cohesive devices to link ideas more seamlessly, such as 'furthermore' or 'in addition' instead of 'additionally'.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, with good use of terms like 'problem formulation', 'design architecture', and 'cutting-edge technologies'. The language is natural and effective. To reach a band 9, you could incorporate a wider range of less common vocabulary and more sophisticated expressions, such as 'broadened my expertise' instead of 'a lot of experience was gained'.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The grammar is largely accurate, with a good mix of sentence structures. There are minor issues, such as the passive voice in 'a lot of experience was gained' and 'my technical and leadership skills were also developed', which could be more active and direct. Also, 'a new challenge is chased' is slightly awkward; 'I am seeking a new challenge' would be more natural. Overall, the letter demonstrates strong grammatical control.

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