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Band 5+: You want to apply for a position as a seasonal camp counselor at a local summer camp for children. Write a letter to the camp director applying for the job. You should include details about: - your previous experience working with children - any special skills you can teach (such as sports, music, or art) - why you would be a good addition to their team.

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Dear Office.

My name is Tam , i currently a marketing student at George Brown College.

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to apply for a camp counselor position at youth camp. I am particularly interested in this role because i finds working with children bring enjoyble and i would love to help them to have a fun and memorable summer camp.

I have previous experience through the my summer job, where i responsible for organizing activities, supervising children and making sure they are safe and comfortable. These experiences strongly help me enhance communication, management, flexibility and cooporate skills. About me, I am a energetic , responsible and able to work well with young child in different ages.

I am available to work throughout the summer and can start on May 31. I would to work as a full time during the summer camp and i am able to modifiy my working hours if needed.

Hope i can here back from you soon,

Best,

Tam

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B2 - Upper Intermediate
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summer: 4

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Task Response

The letter addresses the main requirements of the task: it states the position applied for, mentions relevant experience and skills, and provides availability. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions that affect clarity and completeness. For example, the specific type of camp counselor position is not clearly identified, and the description of experience is somewhat vague. Additionally, there are several grammatical and lexical errors that make the letter less effective. To improve, ensure that all points are fully developed with specific details, and proofread for grammar and word choice.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally organized into paragraphs, each addressing a specific point from the task. However, the flow is sometimes disrupted by abrupt transitions and unclear references (e.g., 'About me' and 'Hope i can here back from you soon'). The opening and closing could be more polished. To improve, use clear topic sentences and cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with some attempts at more sophisticated words (e.g., 'enhance', 'flexibility', 'cooperate'). However, there are several errors in word choice and spelling (e.g., 'enjoyble' for 'enjoyable', 'cooporate' for 'cooperate', 'modifiy' for 'modify', 'here' for 'hear'). The range of vocabulary is limited, and some phrases are awkward (e.g., 'strongly help me enhance'). To improve, expand your vocabulary and proofread for spelling and word form errors.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains numerous grammatical errors that affect clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement ('i currently a marketing student' should be 'I am currently a marketing student'), verb tense issues ('i finds' should be 'I find'), missing verbs ('i responsible' should be 'I was responsible'), and incorrect articles ('a energetic' should be 'an energetic'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited use of complex sentences. To improve, focus on basic grammar rules, especially subject-verb agreement and verb forms, and practice writing more varied sentence structures.

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