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Band 5+: You lodged a student visa application with Australian High Commission, New Delhi. Your application got denied because you did not fall under the visa grant criteria. However, it was not the case. Write a letter to High Commission for this oversight. In your letter • Introduce Yourself • Describe what happened • Say what you want the officer to di for you

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Dear Commissioner

I am writing this letter to draw your attention towards my bad experience as well as getting rejection for my Australia study visa. Therefore, the major reason stated from your side was about not matching the same requirements.

On onset, I did my 12th grade from G.T.B Sec. school and now I was planning forward to do quality education from the best university. Along with that, I also choose to get some international experience. After completing my documentation, I launch the file for visa and the shocking part was that my visa was not approved. As a result, the reason they gave me was that you choose higher education. Nevertheless, I choose just the degree to do after 12th grade.

Officer, I want that you will start looking my file again and please pay attention to all the details. As I paid all my tution fee along with my GIC.

I hope you will understand my situation and take affirmative action from your end.

Yours faithfully,

Saksham

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
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Task Response

5.5

The letter adequately addresses the task, but it could be more detailed and specific in explaining the discrepancy between the visa requirements and the applicant's situation. The letter also lacks a clear and concise request for action.

Coherence & Cohesion

4.5

The letter lacks a clear and logical flow. The organization of ideas is not always clear, and the transitions between paragraphs are abrupt. The letter also contains grammatical errors that affect the overall coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource

The letter uses a range of vocabulary, but some words are not used accurately or appropriately. The letter could benefit from more precise and sophisticated language.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

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