Band 6+: Do people spend too much time using technology?

Your pronunciation is quite good. Working on consistency and tackling difficult sounds may enhance clarity.

The answer stays on topic and addresses the question, but it does not fully answer whether people spend too much time using technology. It focuses on the necessity of technology rather than addressing the issue of excessive use. To improve, directly state whether people spend too much time and provide reasons or examples to support that view.

The answer is generally coherent with a clear structure using 'Firstly' and 'Secondly'. However, there is some repetition and self-correction, such as 'when we want to, for instance, when we want to buy something'. The response could be more developed with a clearer conclusion or a direct answer to the question 'Do people spend too much time?' rather than just describing technology's prevalence. To improve, practice linking ideas more smoothly and directly addressing the question's core.

The vocabulary is adequate with phrases like 'in this day and age', 'part and parcel', and 'goes without saying'. However, there is some repetition (e.g., 'technology' used multiple times) and a lack of precise or varied vocabulary. To improve, incorporate more specific terms related to technology overuse, such as 'excessive screen time', 'digital dependency', or 'technological saturation'.

The grammar is mostly understandable but contains errors. For example, 'it is become' should be 'it has become'. There is also a run-on sentence: 'we definitely use the internet, technology so it goes without saying'. The sentence structure is simple with limited range. To improve, practice using a variety of tenses and complex structures, and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms.