Band 7+: Do people spend too much time using technology?

Your pronunciation is very good. Aim to refine subtleties and intonation to further improve.

The answer stays on topic and directly addresses the question, providing a clear opinion and relevant points about the effects of excessive technology use. It is appropriately general, avoiding personal anecdotes. To achieve a higher score, the response could be developed further with more specific examples or a more nuanced discussion, such as considering different age groups or contexts, and could explore the balance between benefits and drawbacks in greater depth.

The answer is coherent and logically organized, with a clear opinion and supporting points. However, it is quite brief and lacks development. To achieve a higher score, you could expand on your ideas with examples or further explanation. The use of cohesive devices is adequate but could be more varied.

You use some good vocabulary such as 'designed to keep our attention' and 'affect people's sleep, concentration and relationships'. However, the phrase 'use it in modern nation' is incorrect and unclear; the refined version correctly uses 'use it in moderation'. To improve, aim for more precise and varied vocabulary, and avoid awkward phrasing.

Your grammar is mostly accurate, with correct use of complex structures like 'so it can be difficult to stop using them'. However, the phrase 'use it in modern nation' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The refined version corrects this to 'use it in moderation'. To score higher, ensure all sentences are error-free and use a wider range of structures.