Band 6+: How might the way people experience travel change as virtual reality becomes more sophisticated?

Your pronunciation is quite good. Working on consistency and tackling difficult sounds may enhance clarity.

The response addresses the question but struggles to maintain the required level of abstraction for Part 3. While the first point regarding the human desire for physical sensation is relevant, the second point shifts into a speculative discussion about market trends and the cost of hardware, which deviates from the core topic of how the 'experience of travel' changes. To improve, avoid focusing on the economics of consumer electronics and instead focus on the qualitative aspects of travel - for example, how VR might complement physical travel (as a preview tool) or how it might replace certain types of tourism (such as visiting historical sites). Additionally, ensure the answer remains general; while you avoided personal anecdotes, the arguments presented were somewhat narrow in scope. Aim to explore broader societal implications to achieve a higher score.

You maintained a steady flow and used basic cohesive devices like 'First of all' and 'Secondly' to structure your argument. However, the logic in your second point is somewhat circular and difficult to follow (the idea that there won't be more buyers in 2050 is a bit confusing). To improve, try to develop your ideas more logically and use a wider range of linking words such as 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'on the other hand' to connect complex ideas.

Your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, but it is quite basic and repetitive (e.g., using 'change much' and 'won't be worth it'). To reach a higher band, you should use more precise and sophisticated terminology related to the topic, such as 'immersive experiences,' 'sensory stimulation,' 'technological advancements,' or 'cost-effective alternatives.' Avoid overusing simple words like 'good' or 'big'.

You used a mix of simple and compound sentences, which is good. However, there are several grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrasings. For example, 'the prices will grow up' should be 'prices will increase' or 'go up' (we use 'grow up' for people). Also, 'in the nearest future' is better expressed as 'in the near future.' Aim to use more complex structures, such as conditional sentences (e.g., 'Even if VR becomes more advanced, it will never replace...') to demonstrate higher proficiency.