Band 4+: IELTS Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph shows the percentage change in total crime arrests for persons under 18 by locality (urban, suburban, and rural areas) between 1995 and 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The report attempts to address the task by describing trends in the line graph, but it contains several inaccuracies and unclear descriptions that detract from the overall task achievement. Key data points are misreported (e.g., urban starting at 0% instead of 0.5%, and the final value of -5% is described as 'about 5%' without the negative sign). The description of trends is confusing and sometimes contradictory (e.g., 'increased significantly to about 1%' followed by 'decreased dramatically to about 1%'). Comparisons between categories are attempted but not always clear or accurate. The report would benefit from a clearer structure, more precise data reporting, and a focus on the main features such as the peak in suburban arrests in 1996 and the overall decline in urban arrests. Additionally, proofreading for spelling and grammar errors (e.g., 'graped', 'slightl', 'over took') is recommended.

The report attempts to describe the main trends but lacks a clear and logical structure. The information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner, making it difficult to follow the sequence of changes over time. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often inaccurate (e.g., 'next', 'by contrast', 'whereas'). Paragraphing is not effectively managed, and the report would benefit from a clearer overall organization, such as grouping information by locality or time period. To improve, focus on creating a clear overview and then systematically describing the data for each category, using appropriate linking words to show contrast and sequence.

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with several inaccuracies and inappropriate word choices (e.g., 'quantity change' instead of 'percentage change', 'graped' instead of 'arrests', 'slightl grow' instead of 'slight growth'). There is an over-reliance on basic words like 'increased', 'decreased', and 'dropped', without sufficient variety or precision. The report would benefit from a wider range of vocabulary related to trends (e.g., 'peaked', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'a significant rise', 'a sharp decline'). Additionally, ensure that terms are used correctly and naturally in context.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that significantly hinder clarity. Issues include incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'it declined gradually from 8% to -2% in 1996' - the timeline is confused), subject-verb agreement problems, missing articles, and punctuation errors (e.g., missing commas, incorrect capitalization). Sentence structures are often incomplete or run-on, making the report difficult to read. To improve, practice using a variety of sentence structures (simple, compound, complex) accurately, and pay close attention to basic grammar rules such as tense consistency, article usage, and punctuation.