Band 5+: information about salaries of secondary/high scholl teachers in five countries in 2009

The report addresses the task by describing the main features of the salary data, such as starting salaries, salaries after 15 years, maximum salaries, and years to reach maximum. It correctly identifies Luxembourg as having the highest starting salary and notes that Denmark and Australia reach maximum salary fastest. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions: it states Luxembourg paid 'two times more' than the other four countries, which is not entirely accurate (it is higher but not exactly double for all). It also mentions Japan as having the 'best evolution' without specifying what that means, and it does not provide a clear overview or comparison of all countries systematically. The report lacks a clear structure and some data points are imprecise. To improve, organize the information into clear paragraphs (e.g., overview, then details), use specific figures, and ensure all key trends are accurately described.

The report has a logical structure, but the flow is somewhat disrupted by informal phrasing and a lack of clear paragraphing. The introduction is abrupt, and the body could be better organized with clear topic sentences. Use cohesive devices more effectively to link ideas and ensure the message is easy to follow. Consider grouping countries with similar patterns and using signposting language to guide the reader.

The vocabulary is adequate but limited, with some informal and imprecise choices (e.g., 'beetween', 'begining', 'carrer', 'informations', 'two times more', 'a lot of year'). To improve, use a wider range of precise and formal vocabulary related to data description (e.g., 'starting salary', 'salary progression', 'peak salary', 'years of experience required'). Avoid informal expressions and ensure correct word forms and collocations.

There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect clarity, such as subject-verb agreement ('salaries ... is'), incorrect plural forms ('informations', 'countries' vs 'country'), and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple and repetitive. To improve, use a wider range of complex structures (e.g., relative clauses, conditionals) and ensure accuracy in subject-verb agreement, pluralization, and article usage. Proofread to eliminate basic errors.