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Band 4+: taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Tour operator

I am hereby, expressing my intrest fro attending one week walking tour in mountains. Firstly, the tour will determain my level in competation and it will help me to increase my level of fitness and tobecome good player in coming competition.

Furthernote, I would like to ask you, the information abaut the exactly dates of the tour, that will be started and ended, not only that, I want to know also the prices for participating.Morever, you can share these information about prices and the schedules of tour through my phone number / whatsapp:0788880471 or my emai: njeanpierre962@gmail.com.

Currently, I’m not in good mood, last week I’was seak and I hospitalized in Kanombe hospital but Im starting to be recovery. It will be even better the tour in motain will be started in the period of I will be rcovely and my level of fitness increased.

Best regards

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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level: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses the task requirements, explaining interest, asking for information, and expressing concerns. However, some information is irrelevant or inappropriate, such as detailing the writer's illness and hospitalization. To improve, focus on directly addressing the task points with concise and relevant information. For example, instead of detailing your illness, briefly mention your current fitness level and ask if the tour is suitable for someone with limited fitness.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is somewhat unclear, and the progression of ideas is not always logical. The introduction is abrupt, and the connections between sentences and paragraphs need improvement. For example, the transition between expressing interest and asking for information could be smoother. Consider using more cohesive devices to link your ideas and ensure a clearer flow.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is basic and sometimes inaccurate ('intrest fro,' 'determain,' 'abaut'). There is a lack of precision in word choice, which affects the clarity of the message. To improve, try to use a wider range of vocabulary that is more specific to the context of a walking tour and expressing concerns about fitness. Use a thesaurus to find synonyms and expand your lexical range.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains numerous grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses ('Im starting,' 'I'was seak'), incorrect word forms ('intrest fro,' 'determain,' 'abaut'), and awkward sentence structures. These errors significantly impede understanding. Focus on improving your understanding of basic grammar rules, including verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and correct use of prepositions. Proofread carefully to identify and correct errors.

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