Band 4+: the chart bellows shows the amount of money in billions dollars spent on interantional tourism by people from seven different countries

The report attempts to address the task but contains several inaccuracies in data interpretation and significant issues with clarity. While the overview identifies some trends, the body paragraphs contain conflicting information; for example, the report states the US grew to 100 billion dollars, which contradicts both the visual description and the report's own earlier mention of the US being stable. Additionally, the description of Russia's spending as increasing from 'a fifth to two fifths' is mathematically confusing in this context. To improve, ensure that all data points cited are consistent throughout the text and focus on accurately describing the relationship between the numbers provided. Aim for more precise vocabulary when describing trends to avoid ambiguity. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The organization of the report is somewhat disjointed. While there is an attempt to use cohesive devices (e.g., 'Overall', 'On the other hand', 'Subsequently'), they are often used incorrectly or repetitively. For instance, 'On the other hand' is used twice to introduce different points, which disrupts the logical flow. Additionally, the paragraphing is inconsistent, and some sentences are fragments (e.g., the sentence starting with 'While Russia...'). To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that transition words are used to show logical relationships rather than just as fillers.

The vocabulary used is limited and contains several inaccuracies that affect clarity. There are spelling errors (e.g., 'Garmany', 'badget', 'slightliy', 'Chines', 'significantliy') and word choice errors (e.g., using 'incomes' instead of 'expenditure' or 'spending', and 'states' instead of 'countries'). The phrase 'stabled in both years' is not natural English. To improve, focus on learning precise academic collocations related to data description (e.g., 'remained stable', 'experienced an upward trend') and ensure correct spelling of country names and key terms. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

Grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For example, 'the Chines significantliy surged' lacks a proper noun/subject structure, and 'under a 20 to a 20' is confusingly phrased. There is also a lack of control over complex sentence structures. To improve, practice constructing varied sentence types (simple, compound, and complex) and pay close attention to noun-number agreement (e.g., 'billion dollars' instead of 'billion dollar').