Band 5+: The chart below shows the percentage of children in a European country who took part in four kinds of activities in 2009

The report addresses the task by describing the main features of the chart and making some comparisons. However, there are several inaccuracies and vague statements. For instance, the report states that 'more than 75% of students of 12-15 year old attracted to riding bikes' which is correct (82%), but it also says 'more than 75% of students from these age groups fascinated to watching tv' which is incorrect for 12-15 (80% is correct, but for 5-8 it's 97%, and for 9-11 it's 82%, so the statement is partially true but not precise). The report also mentions 'redcomics' and 'ath' which are typos. The data for reading comics and playing video games is not accurately reported (e.g., 'more than almost 50%' is vague). The report lacks specific figures and clear comparisons between age groups. To improve, use precise percentages and make clearer comparisons, such as noting that watching TV was the most popular activity across all age groups, while playing video games was the least popular, and that bike riding increased with age. Also, ensure correct spelling and grammar.

The report has a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs, but the flow is disrupted by unclear referencing and awkward phrasing. The overview is somewhat vague and does not clearly highlight the main trends. The body paragraphs lack clear topic sentences and the comparisons are not always easy to follow. To improve, use clear paragraphing with a distinct overview and body paragraphs that each focus on a specific comparison or trend. Use cohesive devices (e.g., 'in contrast', 'whereas', 'similarly') to link ideas more smoothly.

The vocabulary is adequate but limited, with some repetition and imprecise word choices (e.g., 'attracted to', 'fascinated to', 'curious about'). There are also spelling errors (e.g., 'redcomics', 'preffered', 'ath'). To improve, use a wider range of precise vocabulary related to data description (e.g., 'accounted for', 'represented', 'exhibited', 'notably', 'approximately'). Ensure correct spelling and word forms to enhance clarity and sophistication. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The report uses a mix of simple and complex sentences, but there are several grammatical errors and awkward constructions that affect clarity (e.g., 'the students of 12-15 years prefer more bike riding', 'the reading comics was ath the 3rd position', 'students less than 50% engaged with the playing video games'). Punctuation is mostly correct, but some sentences are run-ons or lack proper structure. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct use of articles, and clearer sentence construction. Vary sentence structures and ensure each sentence is grammatically complete.