Band 4+: The diagram shows how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing the main stages of chocolate production, and it includes an overview. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions: the step of fermentation is not mentioned in the visual description, and the description of crushing and pressing is slightly inaccurate (the outer shell is removed, not ground). Additionally, there are minor spelling errors (e.g., 'cocao', 'chocolcate', 'apperant') and some grammatical issues (e.g., 'how is made liquid chocolate'). To improve, ensure all key stages are accurately represented and proofread for language errors. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction, overview, and sequential description, which helps the reader follow the process. However, the flow is sometimes disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear references (e.g., 'Once this stage' is not a standard transition). The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, making the progression less smooth. To improve, use a wider range of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'subsequently', 'at this point', 'following this') and ensure each sentence logically connects to the next. Also, consider using more precise paragraphing to separate stages clearly.

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with some appropriate terms like 'harvested', 'fermented', 'roasted', and 'pressed'. However, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'cocao' instead of 'cocoa', 'chocolcate' instead of 'chocolate', 'apperant' instead of 'apparent', 'socks' instead of 'sacks') and some imprecise word choices (e.g., 'ground to outer shell' instead of 'crushed to remove the outer shell'). To improve, expand your range of process-related vocabulary (e.g., 'cultivated', 'extracted', 'transported', 'processed') and ensure correct spelling and word forms. Avoid repetition by using synonyms where appropriate.

The report attempts to use a variety of sentence structures, including passive voice, which is appropriate for a process description. However, there are numerous grammatical errors that affect clarity and accuracy. For example, 'how is made liquid chocolate' should be 'how liquid chocolate is made', and 'beans are ground to outer shell' is incorrect. There are also issues with articles, prepositions, and verb forms (e.g., 'extract white cocoa beans' should be 'the white cocoa beans are extracted'). Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect spacing. To improve, focus on sentence construction, particularly word order in passive sentences, and review basic grammar rules. Practice writing clear, error-free sentences and proofread your work carefully.