Band 6+: The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The report addresses the task and identifies several key changes, but it suffers from significant inaccuracies regarding the data presented in the visual description. Specifically, the report claims that the car park took over the sports field and that the playground was reduced in size to accommodate cars; however, the description indicates that the car park was relocated or added in different areas (such as the former farmland) and does not explicitly state a reduction in playground size. Additionally, the report includes speculative reasoning (e.g., 'This shows that schools now pay more attention to cars...' and 'This happened because almost everyone owned a car...') which is inappropriate for an academic report. In Task 1, you should only report the visible facts without attempting to explain the underlying causes or motivations. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body. However, the transition between the overview and the specific details could be smoother. The use of cohesive devices is functional but somewhat basic. To improve, try using more sophisticated linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'In terms of the physical layout,' or 'Regarding the changes in infrastructure') rather than starting sentences abruptly.

The vocabulary used is accurate and appropriate for the task, such as 'illustrates,' 'noticeable change,' and 'replaced.' However, the range is somewhat limited. To reach a higher band, incorporate more varied synonyms for 'change' (e.g., 'transformation,' 'reconfiguration,' 'redevelopment') and 'built' (e.g., 'constructed,' 'erected,' 'established'). Additionally, avoid making subjective assumptions like 'This shows that schools now pay more attention to cars,' as Task 1 requires an objective report of the data without speculating on the reasons behind the changes. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The grammar is largely accurate, and the sentences are clear and easy to follow. There is a good use of the past tense to describe historical changes. To improve, aim for more complex sentence structures. For example, instead of using two short sentences to describe a change, you could combine them using relative clauses: 'By 1980, the houses had been removed, making way for a new car park.' Also, ensure the opening of the final paragraph is grammatically complete (e.g., 'In 1950...' instead of just '1950...').