Band 4+: The table below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.

The report attempts to address the task by presenting some data from the table, but it contains several inaccuracies and omissions. Key figures are misreported (e.g., employment and study for females is given as 2.26 instead of 2.36, travel times are incorrect, and TV/DVD time for males is stated as 2.50 instead of 2.52). The report also omits many categories, such as personal care, eating and drinking, housework, childcare, and voluntary work, which are important for a complete overview. The overall statement that 'males activities are higher' is not entirely accurate, as females spend more time on sleep, personal care, eating, housework, childcare, and other activities. The structure is basic, with an introduction that merely repeats the task, and the conclusion is limited. To improve, ensure all main categories are covered, report data accurately, and provide a clear overview that highlights key differences and similarities between males and females.

The report lacks a clear overall structure. It presents data in a somewhat random order without logical grouping or clear progression. The introduction is repetitive, and the overview is placed at the end, which is not ideal. Paragraphing is not effectively used, and the flow is disrupted by abrupt transitions. To improve, organize the report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs that group related activities (e.g., personal care, leisure, work, and home responsibilities). Use cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly.

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent misuse of words (e.g., 'bigger' instead of 'higher', 'all leisure' instead of 'total leisure', 'employement' misspelled). There is little attempt to use a range of synonyms or more precise terms. To improve, use a wider variety of vocabulary related to data description (e.g., 'approximately', 'slightly higher', 'notably', 'in contrast'), and ensure correct spelling and word choice. Avoid informal or incorrect phrases like 'more others activites'. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues that significantly hinder understanding. There are subject-verb agreement errors, incorrect verb forms, missing articles, and awkward phrasing. For example, 'The males spent 8.04 on sleep' should be 'Males spent 8 hours and 4 minutes on sleep.' Also, 'which is bigger than male' is incorrect. The report lacks a range of sentence structures, relying on simple and repetitive patterns. To improve, practice using a variety of complex sentences, ensure subject-verb agreement, and proofread for punctuation and spelling errors.