Band 5+: The table shows information about students studying in six different departments at an Australian university in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the table, including gender distribution, first language, and birthplace. It makes some comparisons between departments, such as highlighting the high female percentages in English, Modern languages, and History, and noting that Modern languages has the highest percentage of students born outside Australia. However, there are several inaccuracies and omissions. For example, the report states that 'all departments are mostly packed with English first language speaker,' but the data shows that in Modern languages, only 60% have English as a first language, which is still a majority but not as high as implied. Additionally, the report incorrectly claims that Modern languages is the only department where the majority of students are not born in Australia, but the data shows that in Chemistry, 47% are born outside, which is not a majority, so this is accurate, but the phrasing is awkward. The report also omits specific data for Physics and Chemistry, and the language is sometimes unclear or informal (e.g., 'filled with distributed gender,' 'took the last spot on the list department'). To improve, ensure all key data is accurately reported, use clearer and more formal language, and make more precise comparisons across all departments.

The report has a logical structure, but the flow is disrupted by frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. The introduction is somewhat unclear, and the paragraphs could be better organized with clearer topic sentences. Use cohesive devices more effectively to link ideas and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main point.

The vocabulary is adequate but limited, with some repetition and imprecise word choices (e.g., 'filled with distributed gender', 'packed with', 'took the last spot'). To improve, use a wider range of academic and precise vocabulary, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'minority', 'comprise', and 'account for'. Also, avoid informal expressions and ensure terms are used accurately.

There are numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues throughout the report, which significantly affect clarity. Errors include subject-verb agreement, incorrect word forms, and awkward sentence structures. To improve, focus on sentence construction, use a variety of complex structures, and proofread carefully to eliminate basic errors. For example, correct 'department' to 'departments', 'univeristy' to 'university', and 'depertments' to 'departments'.