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Band 5+: Write a letter to your manager for a 3-day leave to attend a training course. In your letter -what is the course about -how this course will be helpful to your work -suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Max,

I am writing to express about for a 3-day leave to attend a making sourdough course from next Saturday on 12nd. First of all, I was considering about learning my baking skills especially making sourdough breads such as a bagguate and chiabatta since we have been struggling when we have started to make it last month. And I realised if I could more improve these skills, It would be more helpful for our bakery team. Furthermore, I am appreciate to support for our team and happy to use my day off for this time. If I can take this clss I should learn and concentrate to make new recipes by course. We could make more variety of products for new coustermer’s taste even old them as well.

Finally, I would like make sure while I am away for 3 days, I will make sure prepare all of products which I work on this role as much as I can in advance so you wouldn’t be worry about it.

I look forward to hearing from your reply soon.

Regards,

Boram

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Vocabulary Complexity:
A2 - Upper Beginner
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

about: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the task. You have identified the course, explained its benefits to the bakery, and suggested how to manage your workload. However, the response is somewhat limited in depth, and some parts of the explanation are slightly repetitive or unclear. To improve, ensure that each point is developed more fully. For example, when suggesting how work will be covered, you could mention specific tasks or a colleague who might assist, rather than just saying you will prepare in advance. Additionally, focus on improving grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to ensure your ideas flow more logically and professionally.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter follows a logical structure by addressing the three bullet points in separate paragraphs. However, the flow of ideas is often interrupted by awkward phrasing and grammatical errors. To improve, use clearer transition signals and ensure that each sentence connects logically to the next. For example, instead of starting with 'First of all,' which is often used for arguments, use 'The reason for this request is...' to introduce your purpose more smoothly.

Lexical Resource

You have attempted to use topic-specific vocabulary such as 'sourdough,' 'baguette,' and 'recipes,' which is good. However, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'bagguate,' 'chiabatta,' 'clss,' 'coustermer's') and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'express about for'). To improve, focus on the correct spelling of common words and practice using collocations - words that naturally go together - such as 'improve my skills' instead of 'more improve these skills'.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

Grammatical errors are frequent and occasionally make it difficult to understand the intended meaning. There are issues with verb tenses, preposition usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'I am appreciate to support' and 'I would like make sure'). To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of infinitives (e.g., 'I would like to make sure'). Practicing simple sentence construction before moving to complex ones will help build accuracy.

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