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Band 5+: WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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Image for topic: WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The image contains a bar chart showing percentages of Australian men and women engaging in regular physical activity in 2010 by age group. For ages 15 to 24: men 52.8%, women 47.7%; 25 to 34: men 42.2%, women 48.9%; 35 to 44: men 39.5%, women 52.5%; 45 to 54: men 43.1%, women 53.3%; 55 to 64: men 45.1%, women 53%; 65 and over: men 46.7%, women 47.1%.

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The bar chart illustrates the number of men and women in Australia who performed regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, daily physical activity rates were significantly higher among females than males, with participation levels varying widely across age groups for both genders.

Among the 15 to 24 age group, 52% of men did regular physical activity compared with 47% of women. At number of men doing physical activity were at peak. However, following this, the number of females doing physical activity largely increased reaching it’s peak with 53% physical activity in ages 45 to 54.

For both genders, the overall rate of physical activity decreased in the final age group. Number of males in physical activity decreased at approximately 46% in the age groups 65 and over. Similarly, number of females doing physical activity experienced a rapid decline from around 53% at age groups 55 to 64, to almost 46% at age groups 65 and over.

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physical: 9

activity: 9

number: 5

groups: 4

females: 3

doing: 3

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Task Response

The report addresses the task by describing the main trends and making some comparisons between men and women across age groups. However, there are several inaccuracies and omissions. For instance, the report states that men's physical activity peaked in the 15-24 age group, which is correct, but it fails to mention the exact percentages for several age groups and inaccurately describes the trend for men (e.g., it says 'decreased' in the final age group, but men's activity actually increased from 45-54 to 55-64). Additionally, the report omits the initial increase in women's activity from 15-24 to 25-34 and the subsequent plateau. The language is sometimes unclear (e.g., 'At number of men doing physical activity were at peak') and contains grammatical errors. To improve, ensure all key data points are accurately reported, describe the overall trends more clearly, and proofread for grammatical accuracy.

Coherence & Cohesion

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the flow is sometimes disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear references (e.g., 'At number of men doing physical activity were at peak'). The paragraphing could be improved by more clearly separating the discussion of male and female trends, and by using cohesive devices more effectively to link ideas. Consider using a range of linking words and referencing to make the progression of ideas smoother.

Lexical Resource

The report uses some appropriate vocabulary for describing data (e.g., 'illustrates', 'significantly higher', 'participation levels', 'experienced a rapid decline'). However, there is repetition of phrases like 'number of men/women doing physical activity' and some imprecise word choices (e.g., 'daily physical activity' instead of 'regular physical activity'). To improve, use a wider range of synonyms and more precise terms (e.g., 'proportion', 'rate', 'figure', 'peak', 'drop'). Also, avoid informal or incorrect expressions like 'at peak' and 'at number of'.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The report contains several grammatical errors and awkward structures that affect clarity. For example, 'At number of men doing physical activity were at peak' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement ('Number of males in physical activity decreased' should be 'The number of males... decreased'), and incorrect use of apostrophes ('it's peak' should be 'its peak'). To improve, focus on using a wider range of sentence structures with accurate grammar, and proofread to eliminate basic errors. Pay attention to articles, prepositions, and verb forms.

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