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Band 5+: You attend a sports class at your local sports center. Unfortunately, you cannot ontinue to attend this class Write a letter to your sports teacher. In your letter - Say which class you are attending - Explain why you cannot continue to attend this class - Tell him/her what you have enjoyed about this class

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Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to let you know about the music class that i am not going to continue further due to some flaws.

From the last few weeks, the matter regarding the shifting to another city is going on in my family. My father is a soldier and now he has been transferred to Delhi and me and my family is moving to delhi next week however, I am also leeaving the school.

I am feeling disappointed because I am passionate about music. I can join classes in Delhi but here, I always did lot of fun with music. Even, you are the best music teacher who treat us like their own children and always give us special treats as appreciation. In future, If we move back to Punjab, I will definitely love to join your class again. You help me in not only to learn music but also to feel the music in reality. I would really appreciate your kind nature. I am looking forward to making your acquitance. Thank you for your consideration and time.

Your sincerely,

Navjot Kaur

Word Count: 185

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Overall Band Score

5.5

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

music: 6

delhi: 3

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Task Response

The letter adequately addresses the task by explaining the reason for discontinuing the music class and expressing enjoyment of the class. However, there's a slight misinterpretation of 'sports class' as 'music class'. To improve, ensure a clear understanding of the prompt's context and maintain focus on the specific details requested.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally coherent, but the flow could be improved with better transitions between ideas. For example, the shift from explaining the reason for leaving to expressing disappointment could be smoother. Consider using transitional phrases to connect your ideas more logically. Paragraphing is adequate, but ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main point to enhance clarity.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is generally appropriate, but there are opportunities to use more varied and precise language. For instance, instead of 'did lot of fun,' you could say 'had a lot of fun' or 'thoroughly enjoyed.' Expanding your range of vocabulary will make your writing more engaging and impactful.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. For example, 'the music class that i am not going to continue further due to some flaws' is awkward. It should be rephrased for better clarity. Also, 'making your acquitance' should be 'maintaining our acquaintance'. Focus on using correct verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure to improve grammatical accuracy.

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