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Band 7+: You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you about a shop that has cheap second -habd furniture. Write to the shop owner. In your letter -Describe what you need - ask wheather they have these item - and ask what they cost

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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to enquire about the used furniture articles that you sell in your shop.

Firstly, myself Kiran Patel and I just finalised a lease for the apartment at 110 Belmont Drive, London where I am going to move in next month. As my flat does not have any furniture, I was looking for some of the essential items which are gently used but in good condition. Moreover, upon expressing my concern to the friend of mine, he referred me your shop.

Furthermore, I need a dining table which can be either wooden or made of a plastic with capacity of 6 individuals. Also, I need study table with comfortable chair as I have hybrid work model and I need to work from home for 3 days a week. Besides, I require boxspring for my bed which is queen sized and has foam mattress. Additionally, it would be greatly appreciated if you check your inventory so that I can pay a visit to your store to check the condition.

Lastly, I would also like to know the final price of the goods as well as please mention if there is any tax on second hand goods as well as delivery charges if there is any. You can contact me on my email kirpatel11@gmail.com

Looking forward towards prompt response.

Yours faithfully,

Kiran Patel

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

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Task Response

The letter fully satisfies the requirements of the task. All three bullet points are comprehensively addressed with relevant details. The letter is well-organized, uses appropriate language, and maintains a consistently polite tone. There are no significant omissions or lapses.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally well-organized and easy to follow. The purpose of the letter is clear from the beginning, and the information is presented in a logical order. However, there are a few areas where the coherence could be improved. For example, the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother. Instead of starting the third paragraph with "Furthermore," consider using a phrase that directly connects to the previous point about needing furniture. Also, avoid starting sentences with "Besides" and "Moreover". Instead, use transition words such as "In addition" or "Additionally".

Lexical Resource

The letter demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the message clearly. Terms like "finalised a lease," "essential items," and "hybrid work model" are appropriate. However, there's room to enhance the vocabulary to make the letter more engaging and precise. For example, instead of "check your inventory," you could use "assess your stock" or "review your current selection." Also, instead of "prompt response," you could use "timely response".

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter demonstrates a good command of grammar, but there are some errors that need to be addressed. For example, "myself Kiran Patel" should be "I am Kiran Patel." Also, "made of a plastic" should be "made of plastic." The phrase "Looking forward towards prompt response" is slightly awkward; consider using "Looking forward to your prompt response" instead. Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage throughout the letter.

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