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Band 5+: You have seen an advertisement for a part-time job that you are interested in. Write a letter to the employer. In your letter: explain why you are writing; describe your relevant skills and experience; ask for more information about the job and suggest a time for an interview.

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Dear Hiring Manager,

I am writing to apply for the position as a nail beautician, which that was advertised on your website yesterday.

I am very interested in this position, because my latest experience was involved in the required environment, I was a nail beautician for two years prior, at a local beauty salon where I serves many international and local clients while handling many request regarding nail art and nail preparation. I believed my skills and knowledge about basic and professional nail care would make me perform very well in your beauty salon. In addition I will attach my portofolio and my personal number in this letter, for the assessment. Furthermore, if I passed the examination process i will be available for the required interview online or offline next Monday. *

Thank you for your time, I hope this message find you well. I will be waiting for my next update regarding my application.

Yours Faithfully,

Celine

Word Count: 158

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
C1 - Intricate
Strive to incorporate even richer and more precise language.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:
No noticeable repetition! Great job!

Task Response

The letter addresses all three bullet points: it explains interest in the job, describes relevant skills and experience, and states availability for an interview. The content is relevant and generally sufficient. However, there are some lapses in clarity and accuracy (e.g., 'which that was advertised', 'I serves', 'many request', 'portofolio', 'if I passed the examination process' which is not mentioned in the task). To improve, ensure grammatical accuracy and clarity, and avoid introducing irrelevant details. Also, the tone is appropriate, but the closing 'Yours Faithfully' is typically used when the recipient's name is unknown, which is acceptable here.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter has a logical structure with clear paragraphs, but the flow is sometimes disrupted by awkward phrasing and abrupt transitions. The opening and closing are appropriate, but the middle section could be more cohesive. Consider using linking words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly, and ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic. For example, separate the explanation of interest, skills, and availability into distinct paragraphs with clear topic sentences.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with some good attempts at formal language (e.g., 'I am writing to apply', 'for the assessment'). However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation (e.g., 'position as a nail beautician' should be 'position of nail beautician', 'handling many request' should be 'handling many requests', 'portofolio' should be 'portfolio'). To improve, use more precise and varied vocabulary, and proofread for spelling and word form errors. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'I will be waiting for my next update' - use more professional alternatives.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains a number of grammatical errors that affect clarity and accuracy. There are issues with verb tense consistency (e.g., 'I serves' should be 'I served', 'I believed' should be 'I believe'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure (e.g., 'which that was advertised' should be 'which was advertised'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on using a wider range of sentence structures, ensure subject-verb agreement, and proofread carefully for tense and punctuation errors.

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