Letter

Band 6+: You recently signed up for a language course at a local college, but you've found that the course doesn't meet your expectations. Write a letter to the course coordinator explaining the reasons for your dissatisfaction. You should include details about: - What aspects of the course are unsatisfactory - Why you chose the course originally - What you would like the college to do to address your concerns.

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Dear Manager,

I am writing to inform my concern about your course. When I saw this course through on social media, it offered some interesting things about the new teaching methods to improve English language.

The main reason I chose this course because I was passionate to enhance my English skills. Especially for speaking part. I was disappointed because the teacher only interacts with the students who are more active. During the course, the teacher continues the lessons without pause. This caused other pupils felt ignored by the Tutor. In addition, the classroom feels hot and quite uncomfortable. I find that the fan in the class is broken.

I would appreciate if the teacher could notice their entire students, so there is no one feels left behind. And I suggest that the fan should be repaired as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Theresia

Word Count: 150

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

course: 4

teacher: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all three bullet points: it explains the reason for choosing the course, describes dissatisfaction, and suggests improvements. The tone is appropriate and the structure is clear. However, there are some minor lapses in clarity and grammar (e.g., 'inform my concern' should be 'express my concern', 'through on social media' should be 'on social media', and some awkward phrasing). To improve, ensure grammatical accuracy and clarity of expression. Additionally, consider expanding on the suggestions with more specific details.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally easy to follow, but there are some lapses in coherence and cohesion. The flow is disrupted by abrupt transitions, such as moving from the teacher's behavior to the classroom temperature without a linking phrase. Paragraphing is present but could be more skillfully managed; for instance, the second paragraph covers multiple issues without clear separation. To improve, use cohesive devices like 'Furthermore' or 'In addition' more effectively, and consider breaking the second paragraph into two: one for teaching concerns and one for facilities.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there is limited range and some imprecise word choices. For example, 'inform my concern' should be 'express my concern' or 'raise my concerns', and 'passionate to enhance' could be 'passionate about enhancing'. The phrase 'the teacher only interacts with the students who are more active' is clear but could be more natural, such as 'the teacher primarily engaged with the more vocal students'. To improve, incorporate a wider variety of expressions, like 'I was particularly drawn to the course because...' and 'I felt overlooked during the sessions.'

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. Examples include: 'When I saw this course through on social media' (should be 'When I saw this course on social media'), 'The main reason I chose this course because' (should be 'The main reason I chose this course was that'), 'the teacher continues the lessons without pause' (should be 'continued' for consistency), and 'This caused other pupils felt ignored' (should be 'This caused other pupils to feel ignored'). Punctuation is mostly correct, but there are missing commas, e.g., after 'In addition'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and correct use of infinitives. Practice writing complex sentences with accurate grammar.

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