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Band 4+: You want to join a local sports club to improve your fitness and meet new people. Write a letter to the club secretary. You should include: - why you want to join the club - what sports you are interested in - any relevant experience you have

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Dear manager,

I am writing to apply for admission to the club in your fitness centre.

My name is Mia and i am 24 years old, from early childhood my life has connected with sport and some activities. When I turned 15,my mom decided took me to the hiking with her, i was impressed, it was handsome experience, there i have made a lot of acquaintance,in addition to this after my 17th birthday i have determined my goal for life – to be fitness coach, consequently i have interested in your club because during all of my existence i have sporty life.

I have already gym proficiency,so that will not be problem to learn something new. Also, wanted to know, which facilities are available now? Maybe yoga and pilates classes are accessible, mostly i interested exactly in this type of classes ,due to my weight loss, I want to tighten my body and skin. So,if this classes are open and recruitment is not closed yet, please, let me know further information.

However, it is not all. My salary is medium and i divide my budget every month for correct using. Currently,i will join a fitness club and i should to allocate money for this too, that’s way let me know please if you have any membership fees ,it is very essential information for me. Moreover, do you have any special offers? For instance, camping with club members and so on.

I would appreciate a reply at your earliest convenience.

Thanks

Mrs. Mia.

Word Count: 252

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

fitness: 3

classes: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all the requirements of the task, explaining the interest in joining, inquiring about facilities and membership fees. There are some minor lapses in coherence and clarity, particularly in the second paragraph, and some grammatical errors, but overall the letter is well-written and fulfills the task requirements. To improve, focus on clearer sentence construction and accurate grammar.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is somewhat unclear, and the flow of ideas could be improved. Consider structuring your letter with a clear introduction stating your purpose, followed by separate paragraphs addressing each of the bullet points provided in the task (reason for joining, questions about facilities, and inquiries about fees and offers). Using more cohesive devices (e.g., 'furthermore,' 'in addition to') would also help to link your ideas more smoothly.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, but there are instances where more precise or natural word choices could enhance the letter. For example, instead of saying 'my life has connected with sport,' you could say 'I have been involved in sports.' Try to vary your vocabulary and use more specific terms related to fitness and club memberships.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Pay close attention to verb tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and correct article usage. For example, 'decided took me' should be 'decided to take me,' and 'i have interested' should be 'I am interested.' Proofread carefully to identify and correct these errors.

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