Band 6+: You want to join a local sports club to improve your fitness and meet new people. Write a letter to the club secretary. You should include: - why you want to join the club - what sports you are interested in - any relevant experience you have

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the task. The candidate clearly states their interest in volleyball and basketball, mentions their previous experience, and asks about costs and times. However, the response could be improved by providing more specific details to make the letter feel more natural and fully developed. For example, instead of saying experience is 'good enough,' the candidate could specify if they played at a competitive or recreational level. Additionally, the phrasing 'to make sure that I will contribute to them' regarding membership costs is slightly awkward and unclear; it would be better to express a desire to understand the financial commitment. Expanding on the 'meeting times' by asking for a weekly schedule would also enhance the task achievement.

The letter follows a logical structure and addresses all parts of the prompt. However, the transitions between ideas are somewhat abrupt. To improve, use more sophisticated cohesive devices and linking words (e.g., 'Regarding my experience...' or 'In addition to my interest in sports...'). Additionally, ensure there is proper spacing after punctuation marks to improve the visual flow and readability.

The vocabulary used is functional and clear, but it is somewhat basic and repetitive (e.g., using 'good' and 'sports' multiple times). To reach a higher band, try to use more precise and varied terminology. Instead of 'show my sport skills,' you could use 'engage in athletic activities' or 'utilize my sporting abilities.' Instead of 'good enough,' consider 'competent' or 'intermediate level.'

There are several grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrasings that hinder the natural flow. For example, 'when it will be needed' should be 'when it is needed,' and 'I am writing to you to ask' is slightly wordy. There are also issues with punctuation spacing. Focus on mastering conditional sentences and ensuring that verb tenses are used correctly in complex sentences. Aim for a wider variety of sentence structures, such as using relative clauses to combine ideas.