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Band 5+: You want to join a local sports club to improve your fitness and meet new people. Write a letter to the club secretary. You should include: - why you want to join the club - what sports you are interested in - any relevant experience you have

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DEAR MR. SECRETARY,

I HOPE YOU ARE HAVING A GREAT TIME NOW. BY THE WAY, I’M KEEN TO JOIN YOUR CLUB, BUT THERE A FEW INFORMATION THAT I AM NOT AWARE ABOUT IT.

FIRST OF ALL, I’M ANAYETULLAH ALTAMASH. AND I AM A RIGHT-HAND BATSMAN WITH SPIN ORTHODOX BOWLER. I HAVE BEEN PLAYING FOR LAST 5 YEARS IN JUNIOR SPORTS CLUB. NOW I’M GROING UP AND I NEED A PROPER COUCHING PLAN AND A CHANCH TO PRACTICE IN YOUR GROUND. I ALREADY MET A FEW PLAYERS WHO ARE PLAYING IN MAJOR LEAGUE CLUB FROM YOUR SPORTS CLUB.

SECONDLY, I NEED TO KNOW ABOUT THE PRACTICE SESSIONS, AND THE MATCHES ARE GOING TO PLAY. ALSO I’M CURIOUS ABOUT THAT IT WOUD BE BETTER FOR ME, IF THERE IS ANY SCHOLARSHIP DUE TO MY FINANCIAL ISSUES.

FINALLY, WOULD YOU PLEASE SEND ME A BRUCHIRE OF YOUR CLUB WITH DETAILS OF THE FEES FOR APPLY. AND HOW MAY I APPLY TO THE CLUB?

THEREFORE, I’M KEENLY WAITING FOR YOUR ANSWER. KINDLY REPLY AS SOON AS POSSIBLE THAT I CAN JOIN YOU EARLY!

BEST REGARDS,

ALTAMASH

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5.5

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Vocabulary Complexity:
A2 - Upper Beginner
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

about: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all the requirements of the task, introducing yourself, explaining your interest, asking about facilities and activities, and inquiring about fees and application process. There are some minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, but overall the letter is clear and well-organized. To improve, focus on using more natural and precise language, and ensure correct grammar and sentence structure.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally coherent, but the organization could be improved. The introduction is a bit informal ('I hope you are having a great time now.'). The paragraphs could be more clearly defined around the three bullet points in the task. Transitioning between points could be smoother. For example, use phrases like 'In addition to this' or 'Furthermore' to connect your requests more logically.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there's room for improvement. Using more specific and varied vocabulary related to sports and club memberships would enhance the letter. For example, instead of 'a proper couching plan,' you could say 'a structured training program.' Instead of 'details of the fees for apply,' you could say 'a breakdown of the membership fees and application process.' Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Some examples include: 'there a few information' should be 'there is some information,' 'I'm groing up' should be 'I'm growing up,' and 'cosity' should be 'city'. Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement, articles (a/an/the), and correct tense usage. Proofreading carefully before submitting would help catch these errors.

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