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Band 5+: Your company is planning to open a new branch in another city, and your manager has asked for suggestions on relocation. Write a letter to your manager recommending a location. In your letter: why you think that city is suitable; what advantages it offers for the business; how the move might affect employees and customers.

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Dear Mr John,

Hello and hope this letter finds you well.

I am writing this letter as a response to the relocation proposal at another branch in another city. I recommend Lagos.

Lagos is a very dense location in Nigeria. It has over 20 million residents, making it a prime hub for our new branch location.

I suggest we have another branch in Lagos because it is a prime hub for business development. Earlier stated in my letter I also mentioned that the population in Lagos is an advantage in marketing our Items.

There’s a lot to benefit from our move to Lagos, some few benefits are access to new clientele and be able to tap into a new market. Also we can offer deliveries nationwide to our customers as a way to bridge our old clientele to our prospective market.

I would really appreciate if you heed my humble suggestion.

Thanks in Anticipation.

Yours faithfully,

Thomas Esther.

Word Count: 158

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

letter: 3

another: 3

branch: 3

lagos: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses the task by recommending a city (Lagos) and provides some reasons for its suitability, such as its large population and business potential. It also mentions advantages like access to new clientele and nationwide deliveries. However, the response lacks a clear discussion of how the move might affect employees and customers, which is a key requirement. The letter could be improved by explicitly addressing the impact on staff (e.g., relocation support, commuting) and on existing customers (e.g., service continuity, communication). Additionally, the tone is somewhat informal and the structure could be more organized, with clearer paragraphs for each bullet point. Ensure all task points are covered fully and the language is more professional and precise.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing, but the flow is sometimes disrupted by abrupt transitions and repetitive phrasing. For example, the second paragraph repeats the idea of Lagos being a 'prime hub' from the first paragraph, which could be merged for better cohesion. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some sentences feel disconnected. To improve, use linking words (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'In addition', 'Moreover') to connect ideas smoothly, and ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic. Also, the closing could be more formal and aligned with the overall tone.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, with some good choices like 'prime hub', 'clientele', and 'prospective market'. However, there are instances of informal or imprecise language (e.g., 'very dense location', 'some few benefits', 'humble suggestion') that reduce the overall sophistication. The phrase 'marketing our Items' uses an unnecessary capital 'I' and could be more natural. To improve, expand your range of business-related vocabulary (e.g., 'strategic location', 'market penetration', 'logistical advantages') and avoid informal expressions. Also, ensure word choices are precise and appropriate for a formal business letter.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect clarity. For example, 'I am writing this letter as a response to the relocation proposal at another branch in another city' is redundant and could be simplified. 'Earlier stated in my letter I also mentioned' is repetitive and grammatically awkward. 'There's a lot to benefit from our move' is informal and could be rephrased as 'There are many benefits to this move'. Additionally, 'I would really appreciate if you heed my humble suggestion' should be 'I would appreciate it if you would consider my suggestion'. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, use a wider range of sentence structures (e.g., complex sentences), and proofread for punctuation and word choice. The overall grammar is understandable but not yet at a high level of accuracy.

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