Bar Chart

Band 5+: Writing Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The image displays a bar chart showing the number of girls per 100 boys for two years, 1990 and 1998, across three education levels, with a target of 100. In primary education, developing countries had 83 in 1990 and 87 in 1998, while developed countries had 95 in 1990 and 96 in 1998. For secondary education, the numbers for developing countries were 72 in 1990 and 82 in 1998; for developed countries, they were 98 in 1990 and 99 in 1998. In tertiary education, developing countries had 66 in 1990 and 75 in 1998, whereas developed countries had 105 in 1990 and 112 in 1998.

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The bar chart shows the number of girls pre 100 biys enrolled in primary education, secondary education and tertiary education in developing countries and developed countries in 1990 and

1998. Overall, in developed countries the number of girls had higher number in three types education. Developing countries had the highest number in primary education and the lowest in tertiary education.

In 1990, the number of primary education in developing countries was 83 and developed countries was 95 and the target was 100. The number of secondary education in developed countries was 72 and in developed countries was 98 and the target was 100. the number of tertiary education in developing countries was 66 and in developed countries was 105 over the target 100.

In 1998, the number of primary education in developing countries was increased to 83 and in developed countries was climed to 96 both didn’t reach the target 100. The number of secondary education in developing countries climbed to 82 and developed countries increased to 99 both didn’t reach the target. the number of tertiary education in developing countries increased to 75 and developed countries climed to 112 over the target 100.

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Vocabulary Complexity:
C1 - Intricate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

countries: 16

education: 11

number: 10

developed: 9

developing: 7

target: 6

primary: 4

tertiary: 4

secondary: 3

increased: 3

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Task Response

The report addresses the task and provides a description of the data, but there are several issues regarding accuracy and clarity. There are significant data errors, such as stating the number of primary education in developing countries increased to 83 in 1998 (it was actually 87), and a confusing sentence in the second paragraph where 'developed countries' is repeated twice for secondary education. Additionally, the phrasing 'the number of primary education' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'the number of girls enrolled in primary education'. To improve, focus on the following: 1. **Accuracy**: Carefully double-check the figures from the visual description to ensure you are reporting the correct numbers. 2. **Grammar and Phrasing**: Avoid saying 'the number of [level of education]'. Instead, use 'the number of girls in [level of education]' or 'the enrollment rate for [level of education]'. 3. **Comparison**: While you listed the numbers, try to use more comparative structures (e.g., 'significantly higher than', 'approached the target', 'surpassed the target') to make the report more cohesive rather than just listing data points. 4. **Proofreading**: Check for typos (e.g., 'biys', 'climed') and ensure sentence structures are complete.

Coherence & Cohesion

The report follows a logical structure, separating the introduction, overview, and data paragraphs. However, the progression is somewhat repetitive, as each sentence follows a very similar pattern. To improve, try to use more varied cohesive devices and linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Similarly,' 'Regarding...') to connect ideas rather than just listing data points. Additionally, ensure that the overview accurately reflects the main trends; for instance, noting that while developing countries saw improvements, they consistently lagged behind developed countries.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is functional but limited and contains several errors that affect precision. For example, 'the number of primary education' is incorrect; you should refer to 'the number of girls enrolled in primary education.' There are also spelling errors like 'biys' and 'climed.' To reach a higher band, aim to use a wider range of synonyms for 'increase' (e.g., 'rose,' 'grew,' 'ascended') and 'number' (e.g., 'ratio,' 'figure,' 'proportion') to avoid repetition. Pay attention to vocabulary repetition to improve the overall score.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the report. Issues include subject-verb agreement, incorrect preposition usage (e.g., 'girls pre 100 biys'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'the number of girls had higher number'). There are also errors in tense and sentence structure, such as 'was increased to 83' (when the data shows it was already 83 in 1990) and 'both didn't reach.' Focus on mastering complex sentence structures and ensuring that your descriptions of change (e.g., 'increased from X to Y') are grammatically sound.

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