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Band 7+: The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

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The image depicts a bar chart with 3 groups of data (IBM, Microsoft, Apple) for 6 different years (1980, 1985, 1990, 1995, 2000, 2010); percentages on the y-axis range from 0% to 70% in 10% increments; IBM percentages for each year: 1980-5%, 1985-20%, 1990-25%, 1995-20%, 2000-15%, 2010-10%; Microsoft percentages for each year: 1980-0%, 1985-5%, 1990-10%, 1995-35%, 2000-30%, 2010-25%; Apple percentages for each year: 1980-10%, 1985-10%, 1990-5%, 1995-10%, 2000-15%, 2010-60%.

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The bar chart compares the percentages of men holding senior development positions in IBM, Microsoft and Apple between 1980 and 2010.

Overall, the proportion of men in these positions increased in all three companies over the period. Apple recorded the highest figures at the beginning, whereas IBM experienced the most significant growth and became the leading company by 2010.

In 1980, Apple had the highest percentage at 15%, followed by Microsoft at around 7%, while IBM recorded the lowest figure of only 3%. Over the next decade, the proportion for IBM remained stable before rising sharply to 25% in 1995. It then continued to increase to approximately 32% in 2000 and reached a peak of 63% by 2010.

Apple, on the other hand, showed a more moderate upward trend. Its figure fell slightly from 15% in 1980 to 13% in 1985 before increasing to around 21% in 1995. After a small decline to 19% in 2000, the percentage rose again to 25% by the end of the period.

As for Microsoft, the proportion increased gradually from about 7% in 1980 to 15% in both 1995 and 2000. The company then experienced substantial growth, with the figure climbing dramatically to approximately 45% in 2010.

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Overall Band Score

7.5

(+/- 0.5)

Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

microsoft: 3

apple: 3

proportion: 3

figure: 3

Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response

The report fails to accurately represent the data provided in the visual description, which leads to significant contradictions in the overview and body paragraphs. For instance, the overview claims IBM became the leading company by 2010, but the data shows Apple had the highest percentage (60%) in that year. Furthermore, the specific figures cited for all three companies (IBM, Microsoft, and Apple) deviate significantly from the provided data points. While the structure and language use are of a high standard, the task response is heavily penalized because the trends and comparisons described do not align with the actual information presented in the chart. To improve, ensure that every data point and trend identified is strictly verified against the visual information.

Coherence & Cohesion

The report is well-organized with a clear introduction, overview, and logical body paragraphs. The progression of information is easy to follow. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview accurately reflects the trends described in the body; in this case, the overview claims IBM became the leading company, but the body paragraph data suggests a different outcome. Using more sophisticated cohesive devices to link comparisons between companies within the same paragraph could also enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is appropriate and varied, with good use of terms like 'proportion', 'moderate upward trend', and 'substantial growth'. The phrasing is natural. To improve, try incorporating even more sophisticated synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' to avoid repetition and demonstrate a wider range of lexical control. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The report demonstrates a wide range of grammatical structures with full flexibility and control. Punctuation is used correctly, and there are no noticeable errors. The use of complex sentences to compare different data points is handled very well.

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