Band 6+: how diffucult is to become very rich in today's world

Your pronunciation is quite good. Working on consistency and tackling difficult sounds may enhance clarity.

The response addresses the question and provides a clear opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. To improve, avoid making overly broad generalizations, such as stating that one can 'easily make a lot of money without challenges,' as this contradicts the core of the question regarding difficulty. Instead, try to balance the argument by discussing the complexities of the modern economy, such as competition or market volatility. Additionally, ensure the response remains at a general level; while you avoided personal anecdotes, the reasoning could be deepened by discussing societal trends or economic factors rather than just individual effort.

The answer is coherent and follows a logical progression, moving from a general statement to specific examples (academic vs. business). However, the flow is somewhat simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should use more sophisticated cohesive devices (e.g., 'On the other hand,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Conversely') instead of relying heavily on 'but' and 'so.' There is also a slight lack of depth in the development of the argument.

You used some good terms like 'amenities,' 'academic paths,' and 'market.' However, the vocabulary is somewhat repetitive (using 'rich person' and 'hard working' multiple times). To improve, try using synonyms for wealth, such as 'affluent,' 'prosperous,' or 'financially independent,' and for difficulty, such as 'formidable task' or 'daunting challenge.' Note: In the raw transcript, 'wheel' was used instead of 'will,' which affects clarity.

The grammar is generally understandable, but the sentence structures are quite basic (mostly simple and compound sentences). There are minor errors in article usage (e.g., 'become rich person' should be 'become a rich person'). To achieve a higher score, you need to demonstrate more complex structures, such as conditional sentences (e.g., 'Were it not for the digital age, it might be harder to...') or relative clauses.