Band 6+: Is advertising really necessary in modern society?

Your pronunciation is quite good. Working on consistency and tackling difficult sounds may enhance clarity.

The response addresses the question but could benefit from a more comprehensive exploration of the topic. Consider expanding on the various roles and impacts of advertising in modern society beyond just increasing income. Providing a broader perspective and more detailed reasoning would strengthen the answer.

The answer is generally coherent, presenting a clear argument for the necessity of advertising. However, the connection between increasing income and technological developments could be more explicitly stated. To improve coherence, use linking words or phrases to connect ideas more smoothly. For example, you could say, "Advertising is crucial for increasing income, especially because the expansion of technological developments allows..."

The vocabulary is adequate but could be more precise. "Crucial" is a good word, but consider using synonyms like "essential" or "indispensable" to demonstrate a wider range. Instead of "put our products to Instagram," use "showcase our products on Instagram." Also, consider using more specific vocabulary related to advertising, such as "marketing strategies" or "target audience."

The grammar is mostly accurate, but there are a few minor errors. "Expanding of technology developments" should be "expansion of technological developments." Also, "reach the public attention" could be improved to "reach public attention" or "capture the public's attention." Focus on using correct articles and prepositions. To improve grammatical range, try incorporating more complex sentence structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses.