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Band 6+: Should we rely heavely on our family or is it better to try to be independent

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It's undeniable that children need to be cared for by their parents, so they rely on them completely. When they reach 18 years of age, however, they are encouraged to reduce their dependence on family financial support. Nowadays, teenagers can earn money legally due to the development of information technology and by immersing themselves in a variety of jobs. Generally, this issue affects our generation as we strive to make independent decisions.

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It’s an undeniable thing that children need to be cared by their parents, so they totally rely on them. When they get 18 years of age, however, they are encouraged to reduce their dependence on family financial support. Nowadays, teenagers can earn money to many legally raised by the development of information technology and immersing into a variety of works and jobs. Generally, this problem stands on our ages in order to make independent diseases.

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Task Response

The response addresses the question and provides relevant points. To improve, consider exploring the nuances of both reliance on family and independence more thoroughly. Providing a more balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of each approach would strengthen the answer.

Fluency & Coherence

The answer is somewhat coherent, but there are some abrupt transitions and a lack of clear signposting. The flow could be improved by using more cohesive devices to link ideas together. For example, you could use phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,' or 'On the other hand' to connect your points more smoothly. Also, the final sentence is a bit unclear and could be rephrased for better understanding.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate but lacks precision and variety. While words like 'undeniable,' 'dependence,' and 'immersing' are used, the overall range could be expanded. Try to incorporate more specific and nuanced vocabulary related to the topic of family reliance and independence. For example, instead of 'earn money,' you could say 'generate income' or 'become financially self-sufficient.'

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The answer contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. For example, 'cared by their parents' should be 'cared for by their parents,' and 'legally raised by the development' should be 'legally due to the development.' The phrase 'independent diseases' is unclear and should be 'independent decisions.' Focus on using correct prepositions, verb tenses, and sentence structure to improve grammatical accuracy.

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