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Band 4+: Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter: say how long you now want to rent the apartment for explain why your plans have changed tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

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Dear Mr Hamilton,

I am I’m writing this letter in order to request because I would like to extending my rental contract for more than twelve months until the spring of 2028.

Since my company needs me to stay in this department to supervise some work here. In addition, my boss has turned down my demand to go back to my city because,because as you know, I have family and children there, especially sincethat my kid is sick and needs expensive medications. I simply couldn’t refuse his demand and risk my job. Furthermore, he promisedpromited me a promotion and a higher salary,salary which tempted me.

However,Hower, I have to tell you about a problem in the bathroom. I could not have warm water. I took a shower with cold water,water which affected my health,health and I got a severe flu last week. I am enable to clean myself inon those conditions,conditions and I also know that it requires a plumber,plumber which I suggest sharingto share the payment for.paiement.

I am would waitingwait for your positive response.response, I thank you hean advice in advance for your comprehension.comprehension

Bestbest regards,regards

Fedaoui Meriem Mr John

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B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Task Response

The letter addresses the three required points: extending the rental period, explaining why plans changed, and mentioning a problem in the apartment. However, there are several issues that detract from task achievement. The explanation for extending the rental is somewhat unclear and includes irrelevant details about family and health that are not directly tied to the change in plans. The problem description is present but could be more specific and appropriately phrased. Additionally, the letter contains inaccuracies (e.g., 'extending my rental contract for more than twelve months' when the task asks for longer than six months) and some irrelevant material. To improve, focus on clearly stating the desired extension period (e.g., an additional six months), provide a concise and relevant reason for the change, and describe the problem (e.g., no hot water) in a straightforward manner without unnecessary elaboration. Ensure the tone remains polite and professional throughout.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter has a logical structure with clear paragraphs for each required point, but the flow is disrupted by frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes incorrect (e.g., 'because,because', 'sincethat'). The letter would benefit from smoother transitions between ideas and more varied linking words. Additionally, the final paragraph is abrupt and lacks a proper closing structure.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with some inappropriate word choices (e.g., 'department' instead of 'branch', 'demand' instead of 'request'). There are also spelling errors (e.g., 'promited', 'Hower', 'paiement', 'hean') that detract from the overall quality. To improve, use a wider range of precise vocabulary and ensure correct spelling. For example, 'extend my rental agreement' instead of 'extending my rental contract'.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains numerous grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms ('I am I'm writing', 'to extending'), subject-verb agreement issues, and punctuation problems (e.g., missing commas, incorrect use of periods). There are also fragments and run-on sentences that hinder clarity. To improve, focus on using a variety of sentence structures correctly, and proofread for basic grammar and punctuation. For instance, 'I am waiting for your positive response' instead of 'I am would waiting wait for your positive response'.

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