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Band 5+: Task 1.2 email to the Write an club manager. Give your suggestions about new classes, better equipment, and events that could motivate members. Write 120-150 words.

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Dear Manager

Thank you for the opportunity to know and learn move about the fitness club I am a pleased that you appreciate my opinion and ideas.

I am ready to share my views regarding the fitness club. I have some recommendations for improving the fitness club.

It is advisable to add more running classes because due to the lack of running classes, I need to go the other fitness club. Also, It would be better If you add more dressing rooms because it create a big problem such as, crowded people in the club. However we don’t have a lot of equipments for training muscles and running road. I hope you will take my opinion into account. As well as my advice will help you to make right decisions.

Yours faithfully,

Samuel Adams

Word Count: 134

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Overall Band Score

5.5

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

fitness: 4

running: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses the task requirements by providing suggestions for new classes, better equipment, and addressing member motivation. There are some minor lapses in providing specific examples or elaborating on the benefits of the suggestions. To improve, provide more concrete examples and explain how these changes would motivate members and enhance their experience. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally coherent, but the flow could be improved with better transitions between ideas. Consider using more varied linking words and phrases to connect your suggestions more smoothly. For example, you could use 'In addition to this' or 'Furthermore' to introduce new points. Also, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to enhance clarity.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is adequate, but there's room for improvement by incorporating more specific and varied language related to fitness and club management. For instance, instead of 'more running classes,' you could suggest 'additional high-intensity interval training (HIIT) sessions' or 'expanded treadmill availability.' This would demonstrate a more sophisticated command of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are several grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the letter. Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement, correct article usage (a/an/the), and proper sentence structure. For example, 'I am a pleased' should be 'I am pleased,' and 'it create a big problem' should be 'it creates a big problem.' Proofreading carefully before submitting will help catch these errors.

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