Band 4+: THE BAR CHART GIVES THE PERCENTAGE OF ENERGY COMSUMPTION IN 2007 in two areas. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task and includes the main features, but there are some inaccuracies and omissions. For example, the statement that hydroelectric had the lowest consumption rate in North America is incorrect (it was 5%, same as coal, but nuclear was 9%, so hydroelectric was indeed the lowest, but the phrasing is confusing). Also, the report omits the coal consumption for North America (20%) and the hydroelectric consumption for South America (28%) in the comparisons. The data for nuclear is mentioned but not fully compared. The report would benefit from a clearer structure, more precise data reporting, and a more accurate overall summary. Additionally, there are minor grammatical errors (e.g., 'illustrate' should be 'illustrates', 'consumpted' should be 'consumed'). The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a clear overall structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, but the flow is disrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. The overview is somewhat vague and does not clearly highlight the most significant trends (e.g., the contrast in hydroelectric and coal usage). The body paragraphs present data but lack smooth transitions and logical grouping, making the message harder to follow. To improve, use clear topic sentences, group related data (e.g., fossil fuels vs. renewables), and use cohesive devices (e.g., 'in contrast', 'similarly') more effectively.

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but limited in range and precision. There are errors in word choice and word forms (e.g., 'consumpted' instead of 'consumed', 'percentage' instead of 'percent'). The report uses some appropriate terms like 'dominated' and 'proportion', but lacks variety and sophistication. To improve, use a wider range of synonyms (e.g., 'accounted for', 'represented', 'constituted') and ensure correct word forms. Avoid repetition and use more precise language to describe data trends. Pay attention to vocabulary repetition to improve the overall score.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors that affect clarity and accuracy. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'chart illustrate'), verb tense (e.g., 'had consumed' instead of 'was consumed'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'Nuclear consumed in South America is only 1 percentage'). Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on using simple, accurate sentences, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use the passive voice correctly when describing data. Proofread to eliminate basic errors and practice using a variety of sentence structures.