Here’s an improved version of the essay aimed at achieving a Band 9.0 score:
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of Australian children participating in various sports after school hours in 2010, divided by gender.
Overall, the chart reveals clear differences in sports preferences between boys and girls. Boys predominantly participated in football and swimming, whereas girls were more inclined towards netball, with a significant number also engaging in swimming and basketball.
In detail, football was the most popular sport among boys, with around 20% participation, highlighting its strong appeal to them. In contrast, netball was the preferred sport for girls, with nearly 18% taking part, demonstrating a traditional gender preference in Australia. Swimming was popular among both boys and girls, with participation rates of approximately 13% and 12%, respectively. Basketball attracted moderate interest from both genders, although boys slightly outnumbered girls. Notably, a small percentage of children did not participate in any sports, with non-participation being slightly higher among girls than boys.