Band 4+: The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Location of dance classes Community halls & other 18% 目 Private -studios 48% School halls (after-school) 24% College-based studios 10% Types of dance classes (by age group) Under 11 11-16 Ballet Tap Modern 100 200 96 →p. 136 300 400 Number of students 500 600 700

The report addresses the task, but there are some inaccuracies and omissions. The overview is present but could be more comprehensive. The report contains some inaccuracies in the data reported from the bar chart. For example, the report states that ballet attracts the highest number of students under 11 around 600, but the bar chart indicates 400 students for ballet in the under 11 age group. Also, the report states that modern dance is the least popular among young people around 300, but the bar chart indicates 250 students for modern dance in the under 11 age group. The report also states that modern dance becomes the most popular among teenagers, with 500 students, while tap has 400 students, but the bar chart indicates 400 students for modern dance and 500 students for tap in the 11-16 age group. To improve, ensure that the data reported is accurate and that all key features are addressed. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has some issues with coherence and cohesion. The organization is present, but the flow of ideas could be improved. The introduction is weak and doesn't clearly set out the main points. The overview is also not very strong. Try to group similar information together and use clear topic sentences for each paragraph. Use cohesive devices more effectively to link ideas within and between paragraphs.

The vocabulary used is relatively simple and lacks precision. There are some inaccuracies in word choice. For example, 'pricate schools' should be 'private studios'. To improve, try to use a wider range of vocabulary related to the topic of charts and trends. Focus on using more precise language to describe the data.

The report contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses, subject-verb agreement issues, and incorrect article usage. For example, 'The line graph describe' should be 'The pie chart describes'. There are also issues with sentence structure and punctuation. To improve, focus on reviewing basic grammar rules and proofreading carefully for errors. Try to use a variety of sentence structures to demonstrate grammatical range.