Band 6+: The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing the salmon life cycle in three stages, which is appropriate. However, there are some inaccuracies and omissions: the stages are not clearly labeled as in the visual (e.g., mature fish, mating, eggs, larvae, young fish), and specific details such as the 45-50 years for mature fish, 6-7 months for eggs, 7mm larvae, and 22mm young fish are missing. The report also includes some incorrect information (e.g., 'five- to six-month period' for eggs, 'four years' for fry, 'five years' for smolts) which may not match the visual. The structure is logical with an introduction, body, and conclusion, but the conclusion is somewhat repetitive. To improve, ensure all key stages and measurements are accurately reported, and avoid introducing unverified data.

The report is logically organized and follows the sequence of the salmon's life cycle. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes awkward (e.g., 'Followed by, the fry move...') and the conclusion is somewhat repetitive. To improve, use a wider range of linking words and phrases more naturally, and ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic.

The vocabulary is adequate but limited. There is some repetition (e.g., 'stage', 'turn into') and a few imprecise terms (e.g., 'last there' instead of 'remain there', 'huge' instead of 'large'). To achieve a higher score, use more varied and precise vocabulary, such as 'hatch', 'migrate', 'mature', and 'reach a length of'. Boost vocabulary complexity to elevate the overall score.

The report contains a mix of simple and complex sentences, but there are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings (e.g., 'approximately a five- to six-month period', 'last there around a four years long time', 'it is evident to us that'). To improve, focus on accurate use of articles, prepositions, and word order, and avoid informal or redundant expressions.