Band 4+: the diagram below shows the product life-cycle of the car . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The report addresses the task by describing the main stages of the car life cycle and includes an overview. However, there are several inaccuracies and omissions: the initial stage is described as 'collect raw materials' instead of 'raw materials mined and components formed', and the final stage is incorrectly stated as 'unrecyclable parts scrapped' rather than 'materials and parts recycled; uncyclable parts scrapped'. Additionally, the report omits the step where cars are sold for scrap before recycling. The writing contains numerous spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'illustrate' should be 'illustrates', 'intial' should be 'initial', 'sucessfully' should be 'successfully', 'Subsquently' should be 'Subsequently', 'straigh' should be 'straight', 'feature' should be 'mark'), which affect clarity. To improve, ensure accurate representation of all key stages, use correct grammar and spelling, and organize the description more clearly with appropriate linking words. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report attempts to describe the cyclical process but lacks clear paragraphing and logical progression. The flow is disrupted by incomplete sentences and abrupt transitions (e.g., 'Subsquently, Selling most of them through dealerships.'). The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, making the message harder to follow. To improve, organize the description into clear paragraphs (e.g., introduction, overview, detailed stages) and use a range of linking words and phrases to smoothly connect each step.

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with some inappropriate word choices (e.g., 'crapped' instead of 'scrapped', 'intial' instead of 'initial', 'subsquent' instead of 'subsequent'). There is an attempt to use some topic-specific terms (e.g., 'raw materials', 'components', 'dealerships'), but the range is limited. To achieve a higher score, use a wider variety of precise vocabulary and ensure correct spelling and word forms. For example, use 'commences', 'culminates', 'undergo', 'disposal', and 'recycling process'.

The report contains numerous grammatical errors and punctuation issues that significantly affect clarity. There are subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'The diagram illustrate'), missing articles, and incomplete sentences. Complex structures are attempted but often incorrect (e.g., 'once this step is sucessfully completed the factories deliver the outcome to manufacture cars'). To improve, focus on sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and proper use of punctuation. Practice writing complete sentences and using a mix of simple and complex structures accurately.