Band 4+: The Graph shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The report attempts to address the task by describing the main features of the graph, but it contains several inaccuracies and omissions. For example, the figures for boys' sports are incorrect (tennis is stated as 50 instead of 35, swimming as 'just over 40' instead of 50, cycling as 'around 37' instead of 30, and badminton as '30' instead of 40). Additionally, the report omits the exact figures for girls' sports and fails to make clear comparisons between boys and girls across all sports. The structure is somewhat disorganized, and there are grammatical and spelling errors (e.g., 'english' should be capitalized, 'prefered' should be 'preferred', 'bardinson' should be 'badminton'). To improve, ensure accurate data reporting, include all key features, and make systematic comparisons. Organize the response into clear paragraphs, and proofread for language accuracy. The report falls short of the required 150 words.

The report has a logical structure, but the flow is disrupted by unclear referencing and abrupt transitions. The first sentence introduces the graph, but the following sentences jump between sports without clear signposting. The use of 'We notice that' and 'We also notice that' is repetitive and does not effectively guide the reader. The final paragraph lacks a clear topic sentence and the comparison between boys and girls is not clearly developed. To improve, use a clear overview paragraph and organize the information by gender or by sport, with appropriate linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Similarly', 'Furthermore').

The vocabulary is adequate but limited and sometimes imprecise. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'english' should be 'English', 'prefered' should be 'preferred', 'bardinson' should be 'badminton', 'athlete' should be 'athletes'). The range of vocabulary is narrow, with repeated use of 'players' and 'participants'. To improve, use a wider range of synonyms (e.g., 'participants', 'individuals', 'boys/girls') and more precise terms (e.g., 'the number of boys playing football was the highest', 'hockey attracted the fewest participants').

The report contains a number of grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. For example, 'with barely 20 candidate combined' should be 'with barely 20 candidates combined', 'boys second prefered sport' should be 'boys' second preferred sport', and 'comes before last as only 30 one is active' is unclear. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage. To improve, use a wider range of sentence structures, ensure subject-verb agreement, and proofread for errors. For instance, 'The graph shows...' and 'It is evident that...' would be more formal and accurate.