Band 7+: The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the Australia in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The report covers the main requirements of the task, providing a reasonable summary of the information presented in the pie charts. There is a clear overview and relevant comparisons are made between immigration and emigration reasons. However, there are some areas for improvement: The language could be more precise and sophisticated. Some sentences are a bit awkward or unclear. For example, "Looking from a general perspective, it is apparent that the rate of visitors and refugees who left is similar in terms of permanent careers and as an accompaniment." could be rephrased for better clarity. While the report identifies key features, it could benefit from more specific data referencing to strengthen the analysis. For instance, instead of saying "the foreigners' percentage stood at three times that of the settlers," provide the actual percentages to make the comparison more impactful. To improve, focus on using more precise language, ensuring clarity in sentence structure, and incorporating more specific data to support your observations.

The report is generally well-organized with a clear structure, but the transitions between some sentences and ideas could be smoother. Consider using more varied cohesive devices to enhance the flow of the report. For example, in the first paragraph, the shift from 'permanent careers and as an accompaniment' to 'further studies' could be more clearly linked. Also, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a distinct aspect of the data to improve coherence.

The report demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, but there are instances where the word choice could be more precise. For example, using 'visitors and refugees' and 'settlers' is not entirely accurate in the context of migration reasons. Consider using more specific terms like 'immigrants' and 'emigrants' consistently. Also, explore synonyms for frequently used words like 'percentage' and 'reasons' to showcase a wider lexical range.

The report exhibits a good command of grammar, but there are a few errors that affect clarity. For instance, 'the rate of visitors and refugees who left is similar in terms of permanent careers and as an accompaniment' is somewhat awkward. Rephrasing for better clarity and grammatical accuracy is recommended. Also, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and correct use of articles throughout the report.