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Band 4+: WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The image shows a graph depicting participant numbers for activities from 2000 to 2020: Film club (2000: 15, 2005: 20, 2010: 35, 2015: 54, 2020: 62), Martial arts (2000: 10, 2005: 30, 2010: 40, 2015: 48, 2020: 45), Photography (2000: 5, 2005: 10, 2010: 21, 2015: 35, 2020: 55), Table tennis (2000: 30, 2005: 34, 2010: 29, 2015: 20, 2020: 15), Musical performances (2000: 60, 2005: 62, 2010: 58, 2015: 52, 2020: 50).

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The graph below gives information about the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne and Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is noticeable that the number for most categories exhibited a fluctuation pattern over the period except film club. Although there were significant rises and falls, table tennis managed to maintain its position as the second dominant sector. In contrast, the figure for amateur dramatics finished at a lower level.

Figure for film club experienced total stability within minor fluctuation and maintainned the same level, preserving absolute leadership, accounting for 65 participants . The figure for table tennis overtook amateur dramatics in the first half of the timeframe, when both sectors momentarily shared an identical figure of 20 participants, finally accounting 55 participants.

The figure for musical performances cotinued to rise in the final years, the race of growth slowed down significantly, with a minor increase of just 19. In stark contrast, maritial arts experienced a period of slight fluctuation, holding the same level at 35 participants.

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Task Response

The report struggles to address the task requirements effectively due to significant issues with data accuracy and internal consistency. There is a major discrepancy between the data provided in the visual description and the figures reported in the text (for example, mentioning 'amateur dramatics' which is not in the data, and providing participant numbers that do not align with the trends described). Additionally, the overview contains contradictory statements, such as claiming most categories fluctuated while also stating the film club was stable, yet the data shows the film club had the most significant growth. To improve, ensure that every activity mentioned is present in the prompt and that the numerical data reported accurately reflects the trends being described. Focus on grouping similar trends together and ensuring the overview provides a clear, accurate summary of the main patterns.

Coherence & Cohesion

The coherence and cohesion of the report are significantly hindered by logical inconsistencies and poor organization. The introduction repeats the prompt almost verbatim, which does not add value. More importantly, the report introduces categories (such as 'amateur dramatics') that are not present in the visual description, which creates confusion for the reader. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inappropriate or fails to link the sentences logically. To improve, ensure that every category mentioned is actually present in the data and use transition words to clearly show relationships between different trends (e.g., 'Similarly', 'Conversely', 'In terms of').

Lexical Resource

The lexical resource is limited and often used inaccurately. There are several instances of word choice errors that obscure meaning, such as 'total stability within minor fluctuation' (which is a contradiction) and 'preserving absolute leadership' (which is overly dramatic for a data report). Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'maintainned' and 'maritial'. To improve, focus on using precise academic vocabulary for describing trends (e.g., 'increased steadily', 'fluctuated slightly', 'declined') and avoid using hyperbolic language. Ensure that the vocabulary used directly relates to the data provided.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The report contains frequent grammatical errors that impact readability. There are issues with sentence structure, such as comma splices (joining two independent clauses with only a comma) and incomplete sentences. Tense usage is inconsistent, and there are errors in prepositional usage (e.g., 'accounting 55 participants' instead of 'accounting for'). To improve, practice constructing complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions (e.g., 'while', 'although', 'whereas') and ensure that subject-verb agreement and verb tenses are applied consistently throughout the report.

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