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Band 5+: You are organizing a weekend hiking trip with a local hiking club and want to invite a friend who is new to hiking. Write a letter to your friend inviting them on the hiking trip. You should include details about: - the location and difficulty level of the hike - what they need to bring (clothing, gear, etc.) - what to expect during the hike (e.g., scenery, challenges, duration)

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Dear Tommy,

I’m writting this email to invite you to the superb advanture that I’m planing for mounts. Despite that, you like hiking and hazardous challenges, so I immediately knew it would be suitable for you. Moreover, we are going with some of my colleges from my work so it would be great opportunity for you to make new friends since you are reversed and shy around people you barely know.

Furthermore, the mountain that we will be climbing is not really high and difficult so don’t be too disappointed about it because my co-workers are doing this for the first time ever. Though, it is still dangerous so be ware and focused during the activity, and there are some supplies you have to bringe with yourself for instance, you need a tent due to we are staying there 2 nights, if you like fishing bringe some equipment for fishing, and other items that will be useful and support our journy trough the travel.

In addition, we will be meeting at the local park and go to country side by bus at 9 am in next weekend so be prepared.

Yours sincerely,

Khulan

Word Count: 193

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:
No noticeable repetition! Great job!

Task Response

The letter addresses all the requirements of the task, providing details about the hiking location, dates, and necessary equipment. However, there are some minor lapses in providing specific details, such as the exact location of the hike and more precise information about the difficulty level and scenery. The tone is generally appropriate, but could be more consistently friendly and inviting. To improve, provide more specific details about the hiking location and scenery, and ensure a consistently engaging and friendly tone throughout the letter.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter's organization is somewhat unclear, and the transitions between ideas could be smoother. Consider using more explicit transition words and phrases to guide the reader through your letter. For example, you could use phrases like 'In addition to that' or 'Furthermore' to connect your ideas more logically. Also, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main point to improve clarity.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary used is generally adequate, but there's room for improvement in terms of variety and precision. Try to incorporate more specific and descriptive words to make your writing more engaging. For instance, instead of 'superb advanture,' you could use 'thrilling hiking trip.' Also, be mindful of using the correct form of words (e.g., 'journey' instead of 'journy').

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect clarity. Pay close attention to verb conjugations (e.g., 'writing' instead of 'writting,' 'bring' instead of 'bringe'), and sentence structure. Review basic grammar rules and proofread carefully to minimize errors. Also, be mindful of using correct prepositions and articles.

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