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Band 5+: You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant to thank them. Mention the food, service and the atmosphere. Also, suggest any improvements to make things

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Dear Manager,

I am writing to share my feedback regarding the delicious food and the staff who service me and my friends in Kamandara restaurant while visited on the last weekend.

Me and my friend visited to the restaurant for holding birthday party one of my friend. We booked piv room and several foods at 9.00 AM. I had a planned to surprise her with the staff.

The reason why my circle chose birthday party celebration on Kamandara restaurant because on the online platform like social media have a good review. In additional, the view was very beautiful we saw the cikuray mountain in front of reastaurant. We felt this place matched for birthday party.

This party was very essencial for me and my friends, I am extremely thank you with the service of staff because the personality was nimble and the taste of food was delicious. On top of that, the staff hep me for prefer, take group photos and play music celebration. Making it the perfect setting for our selebration.

Once again, I really appreciate it. I wish I could visit this restaurant again.

Yours Faithfully,

Dhea Aulia Dara

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

restaurant: 4

staff: 3

birthday: 3

party: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses all three prompts required by the task: it mentions the visit, the reason for the celebration (a birthday), and what was good about the food and service. However, some information is slightly confusing or inaccurate, such as stating that food was booked at '9.00 AM' for a dinner/celebration context, which lacks logical clarity. While the requirements are covered, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. To improve, ensure that all details provided are logically consistent and expand more on specific aspects of the food or service to provide a more fully developed response. Focus on ensuring the tone remains consistently formal and that the relationship between the details provided is clear.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter follows a logical structure by addressing the prompts in separate paragraphs. However, the flow is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices (like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', or 'Consequently') more naturally and ensure that each sentence connects smoothly to the next. Some sentences feel disjointed due to incorrect word choices.

Lexical Resource

You have attempted to use some descriptive words such as 'delicious', 'nimble', and 'essential'. However, there are several instances of incorrect word usage (e.g., 'service me' instead of 'served us', 'piv room' instead of 'private room', and 'essential' used in an incorrect context). Work on expanding your vocabulary related to dining and hospitality, and ensure that the words you choose fit the formal tone of a letter to a manager.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

Grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make it difficult to understand the intended meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency (mixing past and present), and sentence structure (e.g., 'Me and my friend visited to the restaurant'). I recommend reviewing basic sentence structures, the use of prepositions, and past tense forms for describing completed events. Pay close attention to spelling as well (e.g., 'reastaurant', 'selebration', 'hep').

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