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Band 6+: You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match

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Dear Manu,

How are you? I hope you and your family are doing well. I am delighted to tell you that our football team won the weekend’s match. However, your absence created a gloomy atmosphere over the entire team.

To be honest, on the match day we felt anxious due to your absence. Do you know Mathew? He was our college junior’s student. Our coach selected Mathew instead of you. Additionally, it wasn’t done on our fault. The match was held at St Joseph stadium which is located at Thiruvananthapuram. The ground was muddy and slippery.

The first half of the match was very difficult, we are struggling to find our rhythm. We are very tensed during the entire match. In the final minutes, Mathew scored a winning goal.

I really missed your presence and energy during the match and celebration. I will visit you next week.

warm regards

Roshma . B

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Overall Band Score

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

match: 6

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Task Response

The letter addresses all parts of the task: it mentions the winning team, describes the weather/ground conditions, and expresses feelings about the match. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. To improve, ensure better grammatical consistency, particularly with verb tenses (e.g., 'we were struggling' instead of 'we are struggling' when describing a past event). Additionally, some phrasing is slightly awkward, such as 'it wasn't done on our fault,' which could be more naturally expressed as 'it wasn't our fault.' Refining these minor linguistic points would elevate the overall flow.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter follows a logical progression, addressing all parts of the prompt. However, the transitions between sentences are somewhat abrupt. For example, the introduction of 'Mathew' feels slightly disconnected from the description of the match conditions. To improve, use more cohesive devices (e.g., 'Regarding the weather,' or 'As for the game itself,') to link your ideas more smoothly. Additionally, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central theme.

Lexical Resource

You have used some good descriptive words such as 'gloomy atmosphere,' 'anxious,' and 'slippery.' However, there are some awkward phrasing choices, such as 'college junior's student' and 'it wasn't done on our fault.' Instead of 'it wasn't done on our fault,' you could say 'it wasn't our fault' or 'it was unavoidable.' Aim for more natural collocations to improve the sophistication of your vocabulary.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

There are several issues with verb tense consistency. Since you are describing a past event (the match), you should consistently use the past tense. For instance, 'we are struggling' should be 'we were struggling,' and 'We are very tensed' should be 'We were very tense.' There are also minor errors in preposition usage and sentence structure. Focus on mastering the simple past and past continuous tenses to ensure your narrative remains chronologically accurate.

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