Band 4+: You rent a four-bedroom house, which you share with two other students. However, there are several problems with this house tiat need fixing. You also find it expensive and would like to find another student to share the spare bedroom. Write a letter to the estate agency. In the letter explain your situation describe the problems with the house say what you would like to happen

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the task. However, the development of these points is quite thin. To improve, you should expand on each requirement. For example, when explaining your situation, you could mention how long you have lived there or who you currently live with. When describing the problems, providing more detail or describing the impact of these issues (e.g., how the lack of hot water affects your daily routine) would make the response more complete. Additionally, ensure you address the specific request regarding the spare bedroom more clearly, perhaps by asking the agency to help find a new tenant to reduce your costs. The letter falls short of the required 150 words.

The letter follows a logical structure and addresses all parts of the prompt. However, the progression is somewhat abrupt. To improve, use more sophisticated linking words and cohesive devices to connect your ideas. Instead of starting every sentence with a simple subject, try using subordinating conjunctions (e.g., 'Since the rent is quite high, I feel that...') to create a smoother flow between the explanation of the situation and the description of the problems.

The vocabulary used is basic and functional, but there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'expencive', 'brocke', 'off', 'aprecciate') that detract from the professional tone required for a letter to an estate agency. To reach a higher band, aim to use more precise and varied vocabulary. For instance, instead of saying 'the lights do not work,' you could say 'the electrical fixtures are malfunctioning.' Ensure you double-check the spelling of common words.

The sentence structures are mostly simple and repetitive. While the meaning is clear, there are grammatical inaccuracies regarding prepositions and word forms (e.g., 'in good conditions' should be 'in good condition', and 'brocke in the middle off' contains both spelling and preposition errors). To improve, practice using a wider range of complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses (e.g., 'The living room, which is located on the first floor, has a crack in the middle...') to demonstrate greater control over the language.