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Band 6+: You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Describe the training course you want to do Explain what the company could do to help you Say how the course will be useful for your job

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Dear Sir or Madam,

Recently I have seen a company advertisement, which provides a range of courses. One of them is closely associated with my particular job. As you know, I work as an engineer in the electronic units development department.

It would be good if I attended one of these courses. This company is called ‘All for the developer’. But this is a German company and it has a representative office here. The company offers various types of directions starting for beginners and finally for professions. It has a wide range of its products with good descriptions, but mostly in German.

As you know, I assist Mr. Thompson, who designs parts of our company’s units using German electronics microchips. Some datasheets are written in German as well due to their specific nature. These courses are quite costly, but Mr. Thompson insists that I should visit them and get some experience of using these chips.

So, I am asking for your approval for this business trip and have an opportunity to attend these courses.

Yours faithfully,

Greg

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Overall Band Score

6.5

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B2 - Upper Intermediate
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Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

company: 4

these: 4

courses: 3

german: 3

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Task Response

The letter addresses the task by describing the training course, explaining what the company could do to help, and stating how the course will be useful. However, there are some lapses in clarity and relevance. The description of the course is vague, and the explanation of company support is limited to approval for a business trip. The usefulness to the job is implied but not clearly elaborated. To improve, provide more specific details about the course content, clearly state the type of support needed (e.g., funding, time off), and explicitly explain how the course will enhance your job performance and benefit the company.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is generally easy to follow, but there are some issues with cohesion and paragraphing. The first paragraph introduces the advertisement and your job, but the second paragraph jumps to the company details without a clear link. The third paragraph introduces Mr. Thompson and the cost, which could be better connected to the previous points. The final paragraph is a bit abrupt and could be more clearly linked to the request. Consider using more cohesive devices (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'In addition', 'Therefore') to improve the flow between paragraphs and ideas.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there is room for improvement in terms of range and precision. Some phrases are a bit awkward or informal (e.g., 'It would be good if I attended', 'This company is called', 'various types of directions'). Try to use more formal and precise language, such as 'I believe it would be beneficial for me to attend', 'The course is offered by', and 'a range of levels from beginner to advanced'. Also, avoid repetition (e.g., 'company' is used multiple times) and consider using synonyms.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The grammar is mostly accurate, with only minor errors. However, the range of grammatical structures is limited. The letter relies heavily on simple and compound sentences, with few complex structures. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate a variety of sentence types, such as conditional sentences, relative clauses, and passive voice where appropriate. For example, 'If I were to attend this course, I would be able to...' or 'The course, which is offered by a German company, would provide...'.

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