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Band 5+: You recently visited a theatre and had an accident there. The staff were very helpful. Write a letter to the manager giving good feedback. In your letter, you should tell: - and describe the accident - how the staff helped you - how similar situations could be prevented in the future.

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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to formally express my satisfaction about the cinema I recently visited.

Although I was extremely on nine cloud while watching a film, I encountered a couple of accidents. These accidents was quite frustrating. The seat was uncomfortable due to its shape. Instead of having an adjustable chair, my chair was not adjustable, causing me to have a backache. On top of that, I noticed that the floor was slippery. It was extremely dangerous for people.

Fortunately, there was a reliable staff who gave me a hand. He looked into my seat and solved the problem even though it only worked for a while. He also mob the floor to prevent someone from falling down. Those were undoubtedly meaningful aids.

I would also like to take this opportunity to suggest you to replace the seats with new ones, as it may give us a convenient experience while watching movies. Also, it is advisable to have the floor mob in advance before the films start.

Thank you for your attention. I hope this feedback will find well.

Yours faithfully,

Reza

Word Count: 185

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5.5

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Vocabulary Complexity:
B1 - Intermediate
Using more sophisticated words could be beneficial.

Grammar Mistakes: N/A

Vocabulary Repetition:

while: 3

floor: 3

Try using synonyms for the above words

Task Response

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development of the ideas is somewhat inconsistent. The description of the 'accident' is a bit confusing; a backache caused by an uncomfortable chair is generally considered a discomfort rather than an 'accident,' and the slippery floor is mentioned but not clearly linked to a specific incident involving the writer. To improve, ensure that the 'accident' is a clear, singular event (e.g., slipping on the floor) to make the narrative more cohesive. Additionally, focus on using more precise vocabulary and ensuring subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'These accidents was' should be 'These accidents were') to improve the clarity of the response.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter follows a logical structure, addressing all three bullet points from the prompt. However, the transitions between ideas are somewhat abrupt. To improve, use more sophisticated cohesive devices to link the description of the accident to the staff's response. For example, instead of starting a new paragraph with 'Fortunately,' you could use a transition that connects the danger of the situation to the relief provided by the staff.

Lexical Resource

There is an attempt to use idiomatic expressions (e.g., 'on nine cloud'), but they are used incorrectly, which affects the naturalness of the writing. The word 'mob' is used where 'mop' was intended, and 'meaningful aids' is an unnatural collocation in this context. To improve, focus on learning common collocations (e.g., 'provided assistance' instead of 'meaningful aids') and ensure that idioms are used accurately within their proper context.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

The letter contains several grammatical errors that impact the flow. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'These accidents was'), article usage (e.g., 'a reliable staff'), and word forms. Additionally, some sentence structures are slightly awkward, such as 'I hope this feedback will find well.' Aim to practice subject-verb agreement and the use of countable/uncountable nouns to ensure higher accuracy.

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