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Band 9: During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job Begin as follows: Dear ... ,

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Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing with reference to the potential job opportunity we discussed during our flight SU1618 on September 1st. I would like to formally express my strong interest in the Tech Business Analyst position for back-office automation at your company.

With a robust background in the banking sector and extensive hands-on experience implementing EDMS, I specialize in transforming paper-based operations into automated, accountable, and transparent workflows.

During our conversation, you mentioned that your restaurant network needs to automate high-volume vendor agreements, HR workflows, and complex supply chain documentation. My career has been dedicated to solving exactly these types of operational challenges. Over the past few years, I have successfully led projects implementing paperless document flows and re-engineered complex “AS-IS” workflows into efficient “TO-BE” models.

I am deeply passionate about implementing solutions that reduce operational costs, which is why I am highly motivated to join your team. I have enclosed my CV with this letter for your review.

Please do not hesitate to contact me if you require any further details. I am available for an interview at your earliest convenience.

Yours sincerely,

Anna M.

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Vocabulary Complexity:
C2 - Complex
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Task Response

The letter effectively addresses all three bullet points: it reminds the recipient of the meeting context (flight SU1618 on September 1st), specifies the desired job (Tech Business Analyst for back-office automation), and explains suitability through relevant experience in banking and workflow automation. The tone is professional and appropriate for a business contact. The response is well-organized and coherent. To reach a higher band, the letter could more explicitly connect the applicant's skills to the specific needs of a restaurant chain (e.g., mentioning restaurant operations or vendor management in the food service industry) and avoid slightly generic phrasing. Overall, this is a strong, relevant, and sufficiently developed response.

Coherence & Cohesion

The letter is exceptionally well-organized and easy to follow. The opening clearly reminds the recipient of the meeting context, the middle paragraphs detail the job interest and suitability with logical flow, and the closing is polite and professional. Paragraphing is skillfully managed, and cohesive devices are used naturally without drawing attention.

Lexical Resource

The vocabulary is wide-ranging, precise, and sophisticated. Terms such as 'back-office automation', 'EDMS', 'paper-based operations', 'accountable and transparent workflows', and 're-engineered complex AS-IS workflows into efficient TO-BE models' are used accurately and appropriately, demonstrating full flexibility and natural control of lexical features.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

A wide range of grammatical structures is used with full flexibility and control. Sentences are complex yet clear, punctuation is correct throughout, and there are no grammatical errors. The writing is polished and professional.

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